An MC pussy who just came from the countryside to the big city. This is actually a plot crutch again, because without it he wouldn't have ended up living in Maya's apartment.
It isn't. She was lucky to be accepted.
A rather emotional act, atypical of the cold-blooded Bella. Probably at that moment she was so excited that she forgot about everything.
Well as I understand it Derek was supposed to inform his sister of her father's arrivals and only once he made a slip because he was working at the mansion.
But on the other hand, it's not a valid problem anymore, considering Josy started living at the HOTs mansion.
all extremely weak excuses.
I am aware that alcuen choices are necessary to the plot (in the end all of those listed are) but to entrust the evolution of a story to unexplained comprtamenti is not a good idea
but there are 2 on which you completely missed the point.
Josy is later accepted at BR, and that leaves some doubt about her intelligence, but that is not why she runs away from home. i've only seen a teenager who runs away from home to go to school in those hyper dramatic movies where the family wants to avoid letting their children emancipate. with the father having to catch up with her by bringing her at least some clothes...
and also the issue of the key makes no sense. if the father wanted the key it is obviously so he can go there whenever he wants, why would he have to warn Derek? Maya only has to be careful of one thing: not to get caught by the father with Josy, any other situation is manageable, just see how the "dumb" MC manages to convince him that he is his daughter's roommate, but yet he risks everything so recklessly.
immediately afterwards even she pretends to have a single room (which normally should create even more doubts for the control freak Patrick)ù
there are very few dramatic moments that make any sense at all