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is ethnicity showing up as Asian in profile despite both parents being white a placeholder or a bug? Also I don' t have any options showing up after the passage where ava spreads rumours about Claire being a lesbian when choosing to focus on the district championship.
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I had that too. Both parents are white but Claire is Latin/Hispanic
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Ok. Your goofy proof reader obviously hasn't done the first page. Its grammatically all over the place. It should read something like this :
The scent, smoke and sweat of the casino are (is or was) nauseating at three in the morning. The soul-erosion (sounds to much like soil erosion) produced by elite, high roller gambling, a compost (back to soil again) (could try "a heady mix") of fear, greed and nervous tension. They awakened the senses in unbearable waves of revolt. ("It" is usually singular)
Whole thing seems abit of an extreme reaction to just going to a gambling den to be honest.
After that seems fine mostly, with a few spelling mistakes and a couple of red code errors.
You do realize the quoted section is the starting sentence of Ian Fleming's novel Casino Royale, right?
I know that not everyone has read every book under the sun, but yeah. Seeing someone critique the opening not realizing it's Mr. Fleming's work did give me a little chuckle as well.
I've never watched Casino Royale. I think 007 movies are boring. I don't even know who Ian Fleming is.
Go ahead, call me an uncultured swine. Bring it!
Go ahead, call me an uncultured swine. Bring it!
you know it’s a book right? ;-)I've never watched Casino Royale. I think 007 movies are boring. I don't even know who Ian Fleming is.
Go ahead, call me an uncultured swine. Bring it!
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So, they were both European Spanish, but by US standards their child born in US is Latina
- May 16, 2019
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Ignoring the line being a direct quote from a classic novel, this game isn't an academic text. Purposeful grammatical mistakes—if done right—can enhance the setting of a scene. Not to mention the entire game is from MC's PoV who's obviously not a serious academia.
Remember, spoken English is different than written English.
So, actual feedback, not simple commentary or jokes (apparently people can't recognize sarcasm even when it's staring back at them), but my opinion:
Attributes and skills are standard for games like this. One thing to be careful with is over-engineering. Usually, having fewer attributes and skills is better than more. It's easier for the developer to make the game, and easier for the player to understand the game. Looking at the list of these traits, I feel like some of them could be condensed.
Easy, Suggestible, Risky, Stability and Excitable all seem to be more niche components to either confidence or self-esteem. I can see how and why each of those pairs can be distinguished, but some of the differences seem negligible. If you describe someone as easy, suggestible, a risk-taker, unstable, or excitable, it all points to the the idea of someone who struggles to say "no," for w/e reason; maybe their comprehension of "danger" is arrested, their gullible, or they're a people-pleaser. Then Learning and Investigation could be bundled into Smarts, then Wiles and Deception and Performance could all be described as Influence.
But I'm sure the devs have their reasons, and it might be too late anyways.
Maybe it hasn't been added yet, but I was expecting personality profiling that updated as traits and skills increase/decrease, changing the flavor of the text. So the dossier might say something like, "Agent Claire possesses self-destructive tendencies. There is little risk of her exposing herself as an agent, but there may be a notable risk she will become absorbed by the stress of the mission. Assessment advises regular check-ins whenever possible."
There is a game with some comparable components here on F95, The Fixer. Might be worth looking at for some inspiration?
If there is going to be any valuable information on the front page, there should be a tab to navigate back to it.
I am not fond of cycling through choices, especially in the earlier parts of prologue. There are a handful of dropboxes, which is more acceptable. But then by the time we get highschool and college everything becomes multiple choice button. There is no reason to have two or three different multiple choice methods. The means of selecting choices needs to be universalized.
Attributes and skills are standard for games like this. One thing to be careful with is over-engineering. Usually, having fewer attributes and skills is better than more. It's easier for the developer to make the game, and easier for the player to understand the game. Looking at the list of these traits, I feel like some of them could be condensed.
Easy, Suggestible, Risky, Stability and Excitable all seem to be more niche components to either confidence or self-esteem. I can see how and why each of those pairs can be distinguished, but some of the differences seem negligible. If you describe someone as easy, suggestible, a risk-taker, unstable, or excitable, it all points to the the idea of someone who struggles to say "no," for w/e reason; maybe their comprehension of "danger" is arrested, their gullible, or they're a people-pleaser. Then Learning and Investigation could be bundled into Smarts, then Wiles and Deception and Performance could all be described as Influence.
But I'm sure the devs have their reasons, and it might be too late anyways.
Maybe it hasn't been added yet, but I was expecting personality profiling that updated as traits and skills increase/decrease, changing the flavor of the text. So the dossier might say something like, "Agent Claire possesses self-destructive tendencies. There is little risk of her exposing herself as an agent, but there may be a notable risk she will become absorbed by the stress of the mission. Assessment advises regular check-ins whenever possible."
There is a game with some comparable components here on F95, The Fixer. Might be worth looking at for some inspiration?
If there is going to be any valuable information on the front page, there should be a tab to navigate back to it.
I am not fond of cycling through choices, especially in the earlier parts of prologue. There are a handful of dropboxes, which is more acceptable. But then by the time we get highschool and college everything becomes multiple choice button. There is no reason to have two or three different multiple choice methods. The means of selecting choices needs to be universalized.
I wonder if it’s a coding thing. I noticed in the cycling choices the choices change depending on the stats. Like you might not see all the choices. That’s true with the multiple choice actions, but those are usually decisions the character makes.
the drop downs are when there is a list that never changes
That might be true, but I have to admit that my OCD also kicks in, when seeing multiple variants of one thing. Then again, it barely happens and if that is the biggest point of critique we're off to a good start
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The goof here. I appreciate any and all feedback as it regards to proofing the game. It's a difficult balance for quoting within the game. Additionally as mentioned by Samu Al Hydit, "Remember, spoken English is different than written English," this is a constant battle we face within the writing of the game. We won't always get it the best. Things also get missed or read wrong despite our best efforts. Please keep these coming so we can better review and fix the game for all. We appreciate each and everyone of you for playing, commenting, and seeking resolution so the game we want will be the best for your enjoyment.
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Hm, this game confuses me everytime I try it. I chose options to make a shy loner that is interested in girls - and every time at college, she makes out with random dudes? Even though she has a girlfriend. x.x
The Dev has a creative understanding of human sexuality. Claire can't be exclusively hetero/homosexual, she is bisexual, all you can choose is which she prefers.