Ren'Py - Abandoned - Blurred Lines [v0.3f] [Studio009]

Hey, hey, not bad! First of all, I really like the look of all the girls, even if they are obviously real images of porn-stars, with Tori obviously being Gina Valentina (which is not a bad thing), but the paths you're setting up are really cool.

Good:
Cool art, with plenty of hot women to go around.
Pretty interesting story.
Fun, and exciting sexually charged scenes.
Plenty of paths.

The bad:
The chapter, whichever path you take, just sort of unceremoniously ends without any indication. It just hard cuts back to the title screen.

The ugly:
Your dialog. I would recommend hiring an editor to help with your dialog writing, since it is pretty bad. I was really taken aback when the 41 year old woman, Liv, refers to her husband as a "beta". Unless that 41 year old spends her time on incel-forums, I was taken out of the experience when she talked like that.

Overall, though, good first outing. I am going to keep an eye on this game, for sure. Hopefully, start a patronage, soon.

i'll list a few things that kinda put me off:

dialogues feel like they were written by a highschooler going through puberty. please take no offense to this, but it could be way better with more developed, adutlike sentences that take themselves seriously. you should work on that

i don't like the unrealistic side of the game and how fast everything happens, especially the way tori straight up jumps on your d-ck the first chance she gets. in my opinion, the build-up is waay more important than simply achieving the reward without even doing anything. relationships between characters need solid progressions with certain amount of time to eventually blossom into something that actually matters

the game size is a little too much for 5 mins of total playtime. i'm no game developer by any means, but there should be a way around that surely

besides everything, i quite like the unique art style. it has potential for sure, in my humble opinion though it needs a ton of work. i'll be following this, cheers and good luck!

A game with great potential! Really nice art. I loved mostly everything about it and the comics elements were really on the spot. The story is set up the way I like it to be and I really cannot wait for the continuation of the game.

Art is overall excellent but the quality noticeably drops for a handful of the drawings. Could use a re-work.

Dialogue feels natural and isn't annoying but needs some proofreading maybe re-writing in a few places. Casual banter between chars who are CIA agents crossing over into frat boy territory, horny teen girl saying way too many lines about how horny she is for the PC, etc.

I could take or leave the font. It's unique and stylish but occasionally hard to read.

Other than that this game is everything I expect from a porno gaem. Also the PC getting to fuck his insanely hot blond wife right off the bat is a very welcome departure from the usual parade of incel-ish contrivances for blue-balling/teasing I've come to expect in porno gaem stories. That alone takes this from a 4 (cus of the minor issues mentioned above) to a solid 5.

Wish the dev all the very best and looking forward to a lot more!