Good first chapter! Plenty of content, and I like that it's not seemingly too sparing about the NTS aspect (as in MC and FMC are already teasing each other about it early on), because there's too many of these games that start out teasing NTS and get us all excited, and then take upwards of a year to actually get to any content of that kind. Hopefully this game won't sit on the teasing already present in the first chapter for too long.
Also, yeah, obviously based off of Melkor's art style, but I don't mind - it's a good art style. Also, couple of typos here and there, but most of the dialogue is passable, and isn't super egregiously Engrish-y. Looking forward to seeing more of this.