On the surface, this game looks good but it's clear that at this stage there are many issues that detracted from my overall enjoyment of the game.
To start off with, the girls are cute and look unique which is very refreshing. The main character seems likeable enough. The writing also is pretty decent as well. There are spots of a good game here but I think that's all there is currently; spots.
One thing I noticed is that there is very very little dialogue. You basically are just listening to the internal thoughts of the main character the entire time. You meet your best friend you haven't seen in a long time and the game offers you maybe 1 minute of dialogue with her and promptly skips forward in time. I understand you can't show all the conversations and some things need to be cut down, but it would be nice to listen to something other than MC's thoughts every now and again. Instead of having MC introduce everyone through her inner monologue, you should combine that with direct conversations. Let the reader learn about her friends naturally and make some of their own observations.
Onto my next critique, I believe the game has gone through well over a week maybe even 2 weeks worth of time but most days are just skipped over entirely. So the main character seriously does nothing of note any of the days we don't see? It starts to feel like it isn't a game and that we aren't a part of the story. We just get to see snippets of her life. There really needs to be more content. Right now the only filler is just listening to MC's internal dialogue. I would like to see more relationship building, even just between her friends. It currently feels very superficial. On top of the rushed pacing, the MC starts out relatively conservative (a virgin who has only done a little kissing) to an exhibitionist insanely fast. Like 3 choices worth? I understand that she's introduced as having a bit higher of a sex drive and what not but the best part of corruption games is just that: corrupting. If the corruption takes place at lightning speed, it's way less interesting and the pay off is much worse. Take it a bit slower, make there be character development if you want the game to be worth more than a fap and to actually tell a story.
My last critique is that as of now, the game basically has one path you are supposed to go for. The other path is basically: do this if you want less gameplay. This type of 'choice' based game is one I have come across often enough and it feels very boring. If you don't want to do what the dev wants, you just receive less content. It is still early on in development so maybe this will change in the future. To give examples, the MC can choose to tease her guy friends. If you choose not to, the next time she is with her guy friend's she nearly goes nude in front of them and teases them anyways. Another time, the MC is offered a 'choice' to try out to be a model. You can choose to agree or you can act hesitant; either way, you are becoming a model and going with the first choice gives you some stats. Why even offer the other choice? My suggestion is to add some type of innocent stat and for the game to actually recognize if you go that route. Otherwise there really is no purpose to any of the choices throughout the game.
This game does look promising, but I cannot help but feel it's rushed. You spent so much time making the game look unique, you also need to put in just as much time to make the game feel unique. Currently there is just a cute looking shell with very little filling. On top of that, the vast majority of that filling is just listening to MC mull over thoughts in her head.
For now, I recommend avoiding this one; even if you enjoy it, there isn't very much content at this current stage.
Good luck with development going forward.
To start off with, the girls are cute and look unique which is very refreshing. The main character seems likeable enough. The writing also is pretty decent as well. There are spots of a good game here but I think that's all there is currently; spots.
One thing I noticed is that there is very very little dialogue. You basically are just listening to the internal thoughts of the main character the entire time. You meet your best friend you haven't seen in a long time and the game offers you maybe 1 minute of dialogue with her and promptly skips forward in time. I understand you can't show all the conversations and some things need to be cut down, but it would be nice to listen to something other than MC's thoughts every now and again. Instead of having MC introduce everyone through her inner monologue, you should combine that with direct conversations. Let the reader learn about her friends naturally and make some of their own observations.
Onto my next critique, I believe the game has gone through well over a week maybe even 2 weeks worth of time but most days are just skipped over entirely. So the main character seriously does nothing of note any of the days we don't see? It starts to feel like it isn't a game and that we aren't a part of the story. We just get to see snippets of her life. There really needs to be more content. Right now the only filler is just listening to MC's internal dialogue. I would like to see more relationship building, even just between her friends. It currently feels very superficial. On top of the rushed pacing, the MC starts out relatively conservative (a virgin who has only done a little kissing) to an exhibitionist insanely fast. Like 3 choices worth? I understand that she's introduced as having a bit higher of a sex drive and what not but the best part of corruption games is just that: corrupting. If the corruption takes place at lightning speed, it's way less interesting and the pay off is much worse. Take it a bit slower, make there be character development if you want the game to be worth more than a fap and to actually tell a story.
My last critique is that as of now, the game basically has one path you are supposed to go for. The other path is basically: do this if you want less gameplay. This type of 'choice' based game is one I have come across often enough and it feels very boring. If you don't want to do what the dev wants, you just receive less content. It is still early on in development so maybe this will change in the future. To give examples, the MC can choose to tease her guy friends. If you choose not to, the next time she is with her guy friend's she nearly goes nude in front of them and teases them anyways. Another time, the MC is offered a 'choice' to try out to be a model. You can choose to agree or you can act hesitant; either way, you are becoming a model and going with the first choice gives you some stats. Why even offer the other choice? My suggestion is to add some type of innocent stat and for the game to actually recognize if you go that route. Otherwise there really is no purpose to any of the choices throughout the game.
This game does look promising, but I cannot help but feel it's rushed. You spent so much time making the game look unique, you also need to put in just as much time to make the game feel unique. Currently there is just a cute looking shell with very little filling. On top of that, the vast majority of that filling is just listening to MC mull over thoughts in her head.
For now, I recommend avoiding this one; even if you enjoy it, there isn't very much content at this current stage.
Good luck with development going forward.
