One of the best renders that I have seen on this page, an unbeatable quality and care in the visual section, I can only say positive things in that regard, but the writing, the story, the script, are a complete disaster, each chapter the story becomes more and more absurd, the characters interact little with each other, a lot of "blue balling", the MC is a species of Nathan Drake, his "sister" I have no idea what personality he has, the other girl is a bipolar super reporter, the main characters are billionaires, etc, etc, etc.
Humble advice, quickly end all this of the conspiracy of the pharmaceutics, and focus on the main characters, develop it and simplify the story, less is more.