CratorH8er
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- Mar 10, 2021
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I know it's a work in progress, but your grammar and sentence structure need a lot of work. I've underlined just a few corrections.Corruption Path NPC content is something I have planned for latter. Most likely June.
But nah, this is what I cooked up.
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An addition to short lived minotaur guards that patiently and valiently defended the Khor'minos gates for 2 years. For such show of unbridled commitment, they get surprise butt sex, along with the complimentary kiss on the cheek.
Basically, you get to force yourself on mino guards after attacking them since it always seemed like a quite a shame that they get to bad ends us but all we get is access to is their front gate, but no backdoor.
So this is how scene plays out:
First guard gets a footjob.
Second one stands ups, jerks off and moos
Third one Blows you/Eats you out while you choke him.
Fourth and cap will have variation. The cap will get fucked ridden by you while his underling holds him down and forces him to blow him. Or, Arona will take his place and the 4th underling will either get untouched or get fucked by Arona. Have not decided.
Couple of reasons why you do not fuck them all in the ass. First, this will already be a parser filled doc sonce I am accounting for companions. And I already have Idea to tease minos based on the fact if you have either Brienne or Brint.
If you have Brienne in the party/recruited and have fucked her, you can tease them along the line "Honesly, you guards should drop all this pretense about your roles as so called "studs", chug couple of pink eggs and let me establish a proper milking/breeding farm. You would all like that, wouldn't you?" or something like that.
So yeah, if you are into the idea of humiliating couple of guys for daring to do their job, this one is for you.
* Should be "...they've had enough."“[pc.name] don't you think they had enough?” Cait says, sensing the malice in you, holding her staff just as close if not closer as during the encounter. “They were just following orders.”
* "Holding her staff just as close as she did during the encounter, if not closer" flows much better than the sentence you have currently.
* "You got me there,” he shrugs."You got me there.”he shrugs. “Still, these soldiers were just serving the king's command. And failing to follow through brings more shame and punishment to oneself than what the enemy can delive,r short of death. So is what you are planing really necessary?”
* “Still, these soldiers were just serving the king's command, and failing to follow through brings more shame and punishment to oneself than what the enemy can deliver, short of death..."
There are more issues beyond this point, but I don't have the time or the patience to keep picking this apart here. Your comma/period use in general needs more attention. One long sentence with commas is better than three 5 word sentence fragments.