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It looks weird having her arms any lower than her face when her ears are there so maybe like this?
also tired having her ears up but since I made her taller and her ears longer, when i draw them up they look outrageous.
I'd say that'd be excellent!! Very nicely done (y) :)
 
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I'm in the process of editing your script file. Later once I'm done, you can have a gander at it and see if it suits your taste. It'll take me a few hours though. I'm definitely not a coder though, so anything beyond the actual English editing is something I can't do. I decided to help the odd Dev here and there. I won't commit to doing it in the future though, but, if you reach out to me I may help again. I'm starting an English Proofreading business, as I believe there may be a decent demand for it.
 

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You should join the .
Legit my coding and grammar are kinda shit.
I only started learning renpy when when I started this game about 4 months ago been googling answers as I need em.
but I have a whole channel in my discord for people willing to help me with such stuff!
 

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I do have a discord as well as patreon, Buy Me A Coffee and a PayPal, all set up but I want some experience first. That's why I decided to help some Dev's as a temp proofreader (y) ;)
PS: I'll continue for a little while here on F95 and go forward from that
 
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I'll do my best to answer these questions, The MC is just a shadow because i wanted it truely to be a self insert with the MC being bascaly formless you can imagine himself to be anyway you want, but i still needed to show the MC for certain parts, thus the bald head and grey skin.

The mom and dad are in fact his mother and father, they are a bi racial couple also for the reason above, so that the player can simply imagine the skin color being whatever they are irl.

As for what the MC is that is one of the great mysteries of the game!
I don't intent to be mean or telling you to change anything, but I would say if you wanted to make a self insert character making them biracial and having a mixed family isn't exactly the best way to do it. Making them have gray skin doesn't really change core aspects about the character. Your explanation just seems kind of silly to me, but good luck on your game
 

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I don't intent to be mean or telling you to change anything, but I would say if you wanted to make a self insert character making them biracial and having a mixed family isn't exactly the best way to do it. Making them have gray skin doesn't really change core aspects about the character. Your explanation just seems kind of silly to me, but good luck on your game
I just meant in a visual sense, myself being African American means I imagine the MC as that visually, so making him biracial hope to have him be imagined as any shade between Caucasian and African American.

I know it seems a bit silly but I didn't wanna make the MC black just cause I am, ya know.

I honestly hope that explains my thought process a bit better , But I am open to other ideas in regards to that if you have any. :)
 
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King Sleepy Hiya, just letting ya know.. I've been working on the script files all day. It's a big job. I'm just about at line 500 for the 3rd day. It's 3am here, so I'm hitting the sheets, pretty tired. I'll finish tomorrow and post the script files here for ya then. Cheers and catch ya laterz... (y) :)
 
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Heya King Sleepy
Here's the script files for ya. Don't overwrite your originals. Make sure you go through this first, going through the game, while seeing if it suits your taste. It was certainly a shit load of work. I tried to follow your style of writing
2 Whole days LOL
EDIT: And yeah, it certainly isn't perfect. I'm sure there's stuff people can pick apart. But needless to say, it's definitely way more reader friendly (y) :);)
EDIT2: Man, I still find edits to be done as I go through again LOL. I updated the zip file again for ya.. I'm sure there's more, but that's it for now. My eyeballs are gonna fall out LOL
 
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I just meant in a visual sense, myself being African American means I imagine the MC as that visually, so making him biracial hope to have him be imagined as any shade between Caucasian and African American.

I know it seems a bit silly but I didn't wanna make the MC black just cause I am, ya know.

I honestly hope that explains my thought process a bit better , But I am open to other ideas in regards to that if you have any. :)
Honestly, we need more black/mixed race protags (I feel like I only see black dudes in NTR games, let alone being protags)! I really liked that the protag was black/mixed.

Lookin forward to more updates, them girls are A1! Especially the orc girl, green skin + red hair :love:
 
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Heya King Sleepy
Here's the script files for ya. Don't overwrite your originals. Make sure you go through this first, going through the game, while seeing if it suits your taste. It was certainly a shit load of work. I tried to follow your style of writing
2 Whole days LOL
EDIT: And yeah, it certainly isn't perfect. I'm sure there's stuff people can pick apart. But needless to say, it's definitely way more reader friendly (y) :);)
EDIT2: Man, I still find edits to be done as I go through again LOL. I updated the zip file again for ya.. I'm sure there's more, but that's it for now. My eyeballs are gonna fall out LOL
It’s about 6am right now but when I get up later today I’ll go through and see what’s up, I am by no means A pro when it comes to writing, so I’m sure you had your work cut out for you, and reguardless of what edits I keep, I’d like to thank you for taking the time to do this. I know it must have been hard but yeah, your a real one!
 
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Honestly, we need more black/mixed race protags (I feel like I only see black dudes in NTR games, let alone being protags)! I really liked that the protag was black/mixed.

Lookin forward to more updates, them girls are A1! Especially the orc girl, green skin + red hair :love:
then for you my friend here is a sneak peek at kalla’s mom it’s still very early, feel free to toss out a name I can consider ( keep in mind she is Irish, And a pure blood orc.)
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Heya King Sleepy .... Here's a link for 50 female Irish names. Pretty good and has meanings for ya as well. So you can kinda pick something relevant to the actual personality of her...
Cheers

20. Meabh (Maeve)
This name means “intoxicating.” In the Irish legend, Meabh was the warrior queen of Connacht.

(This one may be suiting, possibly?)
 
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Nothing like a set of "handlebars" to hold onto while you're enjoying a blowjo..... oops sorry ummm yeah I think Elsie looks fine Heh
EDIT: the middle pic looks about the best as far as ratios, bodily and such... really do like the blue eyes in the first drawing (y)
 
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Alright one last sneak peek for the lads!
As the poll seems to be clear about me just doing a bulk update of all the assets
Here is Kalla's day2 daydream before and after.
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Update on what going on with the redraw i've finished Elise and Kalla's redraw stuff as well as side chars associated with them, Aka Luella and Ghislaine.

Next up is Luna then a like 2 willow sprites followed by Monica (mom) and 1 more sprite for Julie (sister), I just recently Luna's bust and will start on her sprites ASAP!

For now here is the new Luna Bust, i think it turned out well, trying to display her "bad girl" reputation, as well as her more up to date sprites in 0.4b.

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