RPGM Demon Deals [v0.07c] [Breadman Games]

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BreadManGames said:
Hey thank you for the praise, really it means a lot that you'd take the time to write such a thorough review, and fair points on the critiques - to clarify regarding Leslie's bit, what was it you were looking for more of in that scene? Like dialogue about it being his childhood bedroom?
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I have a brain that's constantly thinking forward (and back), it can't sit still. So, while I'm absorbing your story - I'm seeing "bread"crumbs leading forward (see what I did there? lawl). In general, you have paid those instincts off, foreshadowing things smartly. It's been rare where I see something building and you DON'T hit some sort of mark I'm anticipating. Which is a credit to your writing and overall plan with this project.

When it became clear they were headed back to the home he grew up in for an evening (again, he hadn't spent a night there since the game began), I felt like you might do some exposition there on their relationship, prior to him becoming the world's most purposeful cock ; ) For some reason when she walked into the room in that bathrobe (and he noticed that specific bathrobe, if I remember correctly), I'm like, 'Yup. Here comes the backstory'. And then it didn't.

Maybe that's tricky due to age concerns. Blurring the lines there. But I felt like biting into something deeper there could have really enhanced that sex scene. Not that you need get all romantic - it's a cartoon, we don't want that. But advantaging Leslie's phenomenal nurturing skills and interests... you know, milking all that out of the great big cock (which you've handled spectacularly well with her all along)... in that specific setting and scenario, there was a bullseye to hit there, imo. And ya missed it.

I wouldn't want to try and get more specific than that. It's your story to tell, mate. Not mine.

In summary: some recognition between them that he's back in his bedroom, yes. And the pleasure that might organically bring the both of them (particularly her, I would think). Both actionably, and in dialogue. Could have served the story well. Maybe even close the book on the past some and propel them forward? I dunno.

Having said that? I did really enjoy how you burst that pearl necklace of hers apart. Real nice touch there. Which kinda plays into cucking the father (and propriety), maybe? So that did serve a purpose, subconsciously.


Glad my prior post was able to earn some satisfaction for ya. Makes it all worth doing, eh?

cheers, mate
 
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BreadManGames said:
Also! Here's the gif of the full set of poses for Sunny's h-scenes that supporters are whittling down to just 3. I will have a few of my own that are not on this sheet and the $20 tier will have their own that is also not shown here, so she'll have a good amount of h-scene animations - positions 2, 4, and 9 have already been eliminated!

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Holy hell - I'm definitely pulling for #6!! And maybe #8 as well.
 
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