- Thread starter DENGYOU
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I'm focused on releasing chapters consistently. Since I work alone, I don't want to rush and risk quality. A Steam release might come later, near the story's completion.
caravaggio
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I played the game until the first sex scene, so my feedback is very partial:
graphics are nice, I agree with the comment
The writing though.. to me it's pretty bad, everybody speaks in a very unnatural way, making it hard to feel hooked to the plot, which seems like it might be interesting. Also, the master so far has been ridicolous, I didn't fully grasp his role, but how can a slave mc bargain with him at the beginning? ("I'll go to the kitchen only if you give me food") Is he or is he not the master of slaves? The entire conversation between him and Mintvar was, again, very artificial, often I got the feeling that characters had their own line to tell indepentently to whatever the other was saying..
I hope it can be constructive, I think the game is original and I can definetely see the effort behind it and I appreciate it. But to me it feels it should really really undergo a heavy editing of the dialogues.
PS: So sad to see people enraged by playing a black MC
graphics are nice, I agree with the comment
But overall I appreciate it and the general quality of the game, it seems really polished all around.
The writing though.. to me it's pretty bad, everybody speaks in a very unnatural way, making it hard to feel hooked to the plot, which seems like it might be interesting. Also, the master so far has been ridicolous, I didn't fully grasp his role, but how can a slave mc bargain with him at the beginning? ("I'll go to the kitchen only if you give me food") Is he or is he not the master of slaves? The entire conversation between him and Mintvar was, again, very artificial, often I got the feeling that characters had their own line to tell indepentently to whatever the other was saying..
I hope it can be constructive, I think the game is original and I can definetely see the effort behind it and I appreciate it. But to me it feels it should really really undergo a heavy editing of the dialogues.
PS: So sad to see people enraged by playing a black MC
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Thanks for the valuable feedback! I'll work on improving the dialogue in the next update.
I think the game is pretty cool. Black MC is something different. I like it. I love the art style as well.
My main critique is the story.
I don't really understand what's going on, so maybe just simplify it a little bit.
All in all, 7/10 for me.
My main critique is the story.
I don't really understand what's going on, so maybe just simplify it a little bit.
All in all, 7/10 for me.
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In chapter 2, there's a moment when the story shifting to other character. That's not MC POV.
Thanks for valuable feedback! I'll try improve the story in next update.
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Yeah, but don't worry, he won't blend into the shadows.
Cavpal
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One episode of Rings of Powder was more than enough for me.
This is a great game so far. Love the art style, story, and writing. I still have no idea who to trust. Also glad to have another game with a black MC. This, Superhuman, and Alpha Omega are WIP I'm keeping track of. Awesome start so far.
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Deskitteh
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Of all the things people could do with their imagination, self inserting as a different color is really so hard. They could be anyone. Make anything. Write whatever the absolute fuck they want with infinite possibilities. Instead they're mad on a porn forum that the buff elf isn't the color that they literally dice-rolled into with no personal input because some of our previously black ancestors lost pigment by what was effectively unintentional happenstance.
If they're so mad about it, they should just open the image files with the paint bucket and click-click-click. I'm just gonna be a black elf.
Thank you for making a dark skinned protagonist. Having Black men being relegated to Cuckolding, Bullying and NTRing roles has really become tiresome. Its very rare to see a black protagonist.
Thanks for the update, gonna check it out later. The game has been pretty enjoyable so far.