In the parade event, when Ari mentions the colorful woman she spotted, the protag says "She must of rode by before we got here"
"Must of" is a common mistaken interpretation of must've. As dialog, must've works well. Outside dialog, should be "must have"
"Palla let's go-" missing a comma "Palla, let's go—" and also the hyphen should be an em-dash but w/e. Also keep getting errors with disslove being undefined probabyl because I was still using an old save. Making a new one.
Hangout #1 with Miri error
Maybe capitalized something that should be lowercase? Or who knows. I'm not a coder.
The Rei NTR dream where you see him fucking Ari still happens in the second dream and continuously happens if you sleep at night. Every time. Still wish it wasn't such a cope of "Well his dick is smaller plus I'm totally more compatible with her" I hope when he really fucks her his dick is bigger and he's great at using it, meanwhile I'd have not fucked her even a single time before he does.
In Night of Glory, the lewd scene for giving Red half the money says "No wonder you and miss udders aren't san item"
Or something like that. I can't scroll up or open a log. Usually a VN blocks you from rolling back to a choice, but you can roll back as much as you want besides. I don't have a clue why this doesn't let you roll back at all. It's not to stop you from changing choices.
I will always read "Holy crap" in the voice of Peter Griffin as he's saying Holy Crap Louis
Largely skipped the stuff I read and gave corrections for last time, blindly assuming they're fixed.
Still glad she firmly tells me not to sleep with other women. 100% my motivating reason to sleep with women.
Aaand nope, disslove still not defined
It feels like I might be missing something when I ignore it, but whatever.
"Well, My proposal would be" incorrect capitalization of My
"That is how we bridge the gag between our races" gap, not gag
"Human women are not ideal carrier for Numina children!" carriers
"Not only are most births result in miscarriage the child born will more than likely not exhibit any ability whatsoever!" -> "Not only
do most births result in miscarriage
, the child born will more than likely not exhibit any ability whatsoever!" Needed the comma and "are" to "do"
"Well, That 'mongrel' race" lowercase that. Remember interjecting words at the start like "Well," are still the start of the sentence, not the word that comes after.
"You were that assholes biggest fan girl." asshole's
"no choice but to be apart of this degeneracy" apart means separated, you mean "a part" which is the opposite
"Cotton arms herself for combat; Revealing the weapon" lowercase revealing, because it's still one sentence. Also that should actually be a comma, not a semicolon, because "Revealing the weapon mechanisms under her sleeves" is not an independent clause.
I can't comment on all the spanish in the game.
"If you want boss you have to go through us!" comma after boss.
"at first but Erostegia has been walk directly towards you" walking, and comma after first
""(She was right in front of me! How could I not notice!?" It includes a quotation mark at the start as well as a parenthesis but no closing quote or closing parenthesis. The quote is also weird because more things aren't in quotes, not even other thoughts, so I think that one was just a mistake to include.
"Keep looking into my eye's child and feel" eyes, no apostrophe, and comma after it. "Keep looking in my eyes, child, and feel"
"bind to you're blood and soul" your. It isn't binding to you are blood and soul. Also missing a period at the end
"you must have a much better method, correct." Should be a question mark, not a period.
"So, You may" lowercase you
"I told you; I deplore violence."
Technically correct(they're both independent clauses), but a colon would be more appropriate.
"condition three; A test of purity" Incorrect, dependent clause, an also A should be lowercase. Semicolon to colon.
"from my own then there's no need for me to hold on the the Throne, is there?" need comma after own and "on the the" to "on to the"
"I almsot forgot" almsot
"I know a devil when I see one.)" There's no opening parenthesis on this line, only a closing one (and the message before it already closes its parentheses)
"I head in passing at a Cafe... 'Love in the Air." You only capitalize Café if it is a proper name. If the café happens to be named Café, it's fine, but I suspect it has another name. Also 'Love in the Air has no closing mark
"Erostegia and Cotton finnaly make their exit" finally
"questions in thier wake." their
Seems like a fun direction things are taking, I see the potential for good NTS and NTR.
"worry about here is obvious" missing period
"she would surrender, Me and the" lowercase me.
"you two? You okay with what's going on." Should be a question mark, not a period.
"Hey, If we can" lowercase if
"I willing to do my part" I'm
"Not a chance Miscreant! Unless..." Comma and lowercase "Not a chance, miscreant!" Unless his official legal title is Miscreant. Could be.
"concerned expression" missing period
"I may be able figure something out" able
to figure something out
"to lessen it's effects on us" its. A pronoun makes a contraction with an apostrophe so, "it's" means "it is." Without an apostrophe, it is showing possession. "its effects" would be the effects that are from "it"
Miri: "I may need the help of a certain someone though..." Rei's face and hair are a little blurry. I noticed it because then his image changes and it's clearer
"your Lust will icrease by 5 everyday" increase by 5 every day
"If it's too high you'll find" comma after high
Wew, now where on earth could that non-dream NTR scene be? Also you said 3 dream NTS scenes but I count only 2, as I think the third is incorrectly happening before the second, and it never stops.
In Red's hangout #1
"Well, You have proven" lowercase you