I have played for a bit, and i think i can give a proper review.
The humor in this VN is good, even though im not usually much for humor.
The story is great. I like the idea of there being a "real world" and Eternum, so well done on that part.
Grammar is almost flawless.
The biggest issue i find about the VN is the MC.
Hes honestly quite plain and immature, both appearance and personality wise.
He has a very naive mindset where he keeps acting with too much kindness and being to eager to please and be helpful
I'm not saying being kind and helpful is bad, but too much of these and you'll give the impression of a simp or someone too easy to take advantage of.
Or maybe thats just me?
Also MC got fooled by Luna not once, not twice, but like 4 times(iirc) which is kinda crazy, wont he learn?
Then again i dont remember how old the MC is supposed to be, if he's like 14-15 years old then i suppose this personality is pretty fitting, however if he's supposed to be in his late teens to early twenties then i would suggest creating a more mature MC
MCs personality aside i truly like this VN and look forward to seeing it develop into something great in the future
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