noobtrain
I'm deeply impressed by part 3 of the Pool Girl story! You exceeded my expectations in every way!
I love what you did with the slave training with the named NPC! That showed the evil side and slave trainer part of the MC.
I thought the two blackmail events were perfect. They were believable, immersive, and detailed which is lacking in so many stories these days. The sex events were all awesome! The sharing of love interests was very fitting to the MC's personality and game world just as you said they would be. I didn't have a problem with them.
I really liked the loving and heartfelt story with Melissa and her kids especially! You gave all the girls different and unique personalities and this was done masterfully. The girls even have different and unique sexual preferences. I get tired of stories where all the girls have the same personality.
Thank you for writing part 2 and 3 of the Pool Girl story! You greatly expanded the outline I gave you, making it yours. Part 3 is a near masterpiece in my opinion (Part 2 was also). Good luck to you!