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I am guessing with you taking the time to make this design, there really isn't a way to beat her, at least for now. Gotcha. 
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I am guessing with you taking the time to make this design, there really isn't a way to beat her, at least for now. Gotcha.
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- Oct 1, 2019
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Well, all caught up with the Dev on this game. Quite the interesting cast of characters, I have to say. And interested in seeing how that dance contest goes. Thank you so very much for this first chapter, and looking forward for Chapter 2!!!
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Thank you so much for playing the game! I'm glad that you liked it. I'll do my best to improve.
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Since I'm not of the anglo-saxon persuasion I've never used the term, at least not when sober.
Was it a white people slang? I mean don't we steal most of our slang from black people?
First of, congratulations on rolling out your first product. Starting off isn't fun and it's a very bumpy road especially when you have to face a community of folks who do not understand anything about content creation and expect every facet of their wish/dream list to be included in every game they look at.
The story is intriguing, very promising. Although you do not have "supernatural" as part of the tags, there's the allusion to something being either "off" or "special" about the MC as he's able to draw folks unwittingly to him without his awareness or efforts. All the LI's around him are magnetized towards him and not even they can explain why. So, I'm wondering if there's an allusion to that trait behind developed and assisting him achieve his harem.
Before I highlight the errors I spotted (will include them in the spoiler tag), I must say this is the first VN I've played where the MC goes to sleep in different clothing and not the same work clothes or day clothes he had on. Kudos to you for that. I keep wondering if it's so much extra work for the clothes to be changed, lol. I spotted it and noted it. Well done.
There are a few errors, mostly grammatical and word omission and that's expected as you stated that English is not your primary language. Notwithstanding, you did a very good job with your grammar and spelling. For those missed by you and those you had checking, here they are. Of course, I've included a note under each with the correction:
The story is intriguing, very promising. Although you do not have "supernatural" as part of the tags, there's the allusion to something being either "off" or "special" about the MC as he's able to draw folks unwittingly to him without his awareness or efforts. All the LI's around him are magnetized towards him and not even they can explain why. So, I'm wondering if there's an allusion to that trait behind developed and assisting him achieve his harem.
Before I highlight the errors I spotted (will include them in the spoiler tag), I must say this is the first VN I've played where the MC goes to sleep in different clothing and not the same work clothes or day clothes he had on. Kudos to you for that. I keep wondering if it's so much extra work for the clothes to be changed, lol. I spotted it and noted it. Well done.
There are a few errors, mostly grammatical and word omission and that's expected as you stated that English is not your primary language. Notwithstanding, you did a very good job with your grammar and spelling. For those missed by you and those you had checking, here they are. Of course, I've included a note under each with the correction:
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Since you asked for input... (put in spoilers so can be easily skipped over if not in mood for feedback)
Just some quick first impressions, still on my first playthrough.
Only my opinion and have a nice day.
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Just some quick first impressions, still on my first playthrough.
Only my opinion and have a nice day.
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Thank you so much for taking the time leaving feedbacks for the game! It means a lot to me. I'm also glad that you enjoy it as well.First of, congratulations on rolling out your first product. Starting off isn't fun and it's a very bumpy road especially when you have to face a community of folks who do not understand anything about content creation and expect every facet of their wish/dream list to be included in every game they look at.
The story is intriguing, very promising. Although you do not have "supernatural" as part of the tags, there's the allusion to something being either "off" or "special" about the MC as he's able to draw folks unwittingly to him without his awareness or efforts. All the LI's around him are magnetized towards him and not even they can explain why. So, I'm wondering if there's an allusion to that trait behind developed and assisting him achieve his harem.
Before I highlight the errors I spotted (will include them in the spoiler tag), I must say this is the first VN I've played where the MC goes to sleep in different clothing and not the same work clothes or day clothes he had on. Kudos to you for that. I keep wondering if it's so much extra work for the clothes to be changed, lol. I spotted it and noted it. Well done.
There are a few errors, mostly grammatical and word omission and that's expected as you stated that English is not your primary language. Notwithstanding, you did a very good job with your grammar and spelling. For those missed by you and those you had checking, here they are. Of course, I've included a note under each with the correction:
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As for the supernatural tag, in my mind, supernatural is leaning towards superpower and such. Of course, it's probably broader than that. That's why I didn't include it. But, what you said about the MC become a magnet do kinda make sense though. A bit unsure if I should put the tag or not. Hahaha!
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Noted. Thank you so much for taking the time for giving me this feedbacks and checking out the game. Hope you enjoy it.
- Feb 26, 2021
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Thank you for your consideration. I have some more feedback. Again, in spoilers for those who haven't played the game yet or for those who don't feel like reading my feedback:
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So this was a mix of positive and negative impressions. Looking forward to see what you do with this next. Have a nice day.
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Thank you so much for another feedback. I'll be more careful about the writing because having idea in my head is one thing, but transferring said idea into written form is another challenge. So thank you again for taking the time to point this things out.