After Choices'
Free Pass is quite an interesting game so far.
Below, I have segregated my review into categorized sections for ease of readability. I hope this was an informative read for not only the AC dev and their team, but also any prospective players of Free Pass.
~Pros~
I) First off, I really
appreciated the inclusion of a southeast Asian female as the leading protagonist of the game. It is quite the
unique spin on the narrative, as you don't necessarily see a lot of Asian FMC's as the main character in other Ren'PY styled games.
II) Going off that note,
great attention to detail concerning the cultural elements of the game. For instance, when Yoon was showing her friends the types of cultural dishes she makes that are native to her homeland. I found that to be a nice charming little touch, in terms of
"character development" as it helps establish Yoon's relationship-building with other characters in-game.
III)
Varied choice of music and songs. It is always a treat to have Ren'PY VN's include a mix of songs during cutscenes and other important/significant events in-game. It makes events more lively and dynamic in the sense, as opposed to just hearing random sound effects in the background all the time (e.g., birds chirping, cars honking, etc).
IV) Renders are great. CG's are awesome. Animations are pretty fluid. It's clear that the AC dev & team had put a lot of thought and effort into designing each individual character and design. Nicely done overall. In particular, I found Yoon's, Jas's, Amala's and Sukhoon's character renders to be very beautifully customized
~Cons~
Unfortunately, not every game is perfect. And as such, there are always opportunities for improvement.
I)
The grammar: Personally, I did not find the grammar
too unbearable. In that, I
knew enough to understand the general direction of the narrative. However, as another reviewer had pointed out, the grammar
fluctuates between being understandable, somewhat understandable, and in some cases, not very clear. Therefore, it would benefit the dev to hire a proofreader/editor of sorts to clearly polish some of the grammar in-game to ensure smooth conversations and narration of the plot. However, as of v0.50, I can confirm that the grammar has improved greatly from previous versions. So, just try to keep it up, and make the narration more seamless and easy to follow in the sense. Avoid overwhelming the player with too much info, and things should play out fine from a narrative standpoint.
II) I enjoy a colourful cast of characters just as much as anybody. However,
introducing too many sub-plotlines and characters can be a bit overwhelming at times to follow. Therefore, the dev might consider removing some plotlines that are not of a high priority to consider.
Or, if absolutely necessary to include, instead of creating a separate sub-plotline for each and every character, make some minor characters have a brief cameo of sorts. To be more specific, that sub-character will not have a strict storyline with Yoon per-se, rather
just a bundle of small events that they will have with Yoon. Therefore, it makes the plotline more consistent and easy to follow.
Another suggestion: If planning on introducing new characters, programming a sort of "
Diary" option, wherein Yoon can record her interactions among each of the key characters in-game, which can help more closely keep a running tab of relationships and define who-is-who more accurately in-game.
III) Flashbacks are good. Albeit, they
must be used sparingly. Implementing too many flashbacks and perspectives between too many characters has a tendency to
overcomplicate the plot more than it is needed. Therefore, the AC dev & team would find it better to prioritize what flashback elements are absolutely needed to advance the plot and disregard those flashbacks/perspectives that are not entirely needed.
Anyways, this would conclude my review of "Free Pass". Of course, there are still more updates forthcoming, so, I am excited to see how the development of the game will mature in the near future.
But in any event, keep up the great work AC Dev & team! ^^