English: 2
User Interface: 4
User Experience: 3
Art: 7
Dialogue: 2
Story: 3
Opinion: 3
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Avg: 3.43
If you speak English, this is one of the most frustrating reading experiences you'll ever have. I can't imagine this is any better in the Dev's native language, but there's so many issues here I don't know where to begin. Pacing issues, poor dialogue, complete lines that are unnecessary, and just random or useless exposition that give you none of the details you'd need to understand what the fuck is actually going on. And the dev continues to use an hpunch or vpunch to lines like "???" or "!" At the current time of writing, I haven't read other reviews yet, but ALL of them better be "Durr, me rate 5 for pretty models." (Which is still not a good reason to rate anything five stars.) Because the only thing, in terms of story, this has going for it is the premise. Even the names of the two opening characters are unpronounceable, and there's even a line where the loud one's name is completely spelled wrong. "Metxil." And the default names for the girlfriends? "Isilynor" and "Eridani?" Naming characters by slapping your keyboard is not the way, my friend. And I think this is gonna be a long review from me because there is just so much to unpack and just highlight why it's frustratingly bad. That being said, TL;DR: The poor translation added to the poorly emphasized time jumps, "aided" by the laziest excuse for a visual timeline made in MS Paint that doesn't give you decent information, makes this a headache and a half to read. But we all know why most people will "play" this.
The story opens up on two sisters that aren't the main character, which I will actually say is a cool way to start a story. It's a shame it opens up with the DUMBEST decision making I've ever seen in my life it's actually laughable. Aysu and Metztli (No, those aren't spelling mistakes just bad names) are struggling to survive a post apocalyptic world and Met trades all her gear FOR A FUCKING SMARTPHONE. On top of EVERYTHING later on, it's "revealed" that Met is deaf. AT NO POINT up until MC points out that she's deaf, does she show signs of it. She even reacts to sound made by the phone that start this whole rabbit hole of a story. But only after one or two of the bad lore dumps in the form of stories about "The Maker" and Silver-Eyed Witches. The maker, more than likely, building up to a city-wide harem for the devs inferiority complex of a self-insert. And it's all made a little messy to look at by the over-used pencil drawing filter. Anyway, Met solves some puzzle on the phone, it makes a loud noise and this demon looking thing attacks and they're saved by MC and another woman.(I also want to highlight that Aysu exclaims "FEAR!" in her mind lol) And MC's introduction is with the tired ass Die Hard reference that makes me roll my eyes painfully hard.
Moving on, MC decides to bring the twins to her city because they're "impressive" but all they've done is make poor life choices and bicker. MC says they show abilities, but at no point can you the player see or pick up on it. Then, they unceremoniously go back to the city,(on her "black mamba" jeez are you kidding me?) There is another lore dump in here, but it's all nondescript words, "The Kingdoms," "The Ancients," "Defective." And there's another blatant lie about getting rid of defective people because MC is maimed later on for having green eyes. A lack of focus here. Back to the plot, MC flirts with them to an annoying degree, and runs away to town just to jump in the first set of flashbacks about her three girlfriends that can thankfully be renamed as, once again, the names in this are still abysmal. And the entire "drama" between Isil, Eri, and MC is because MC didn't want to take a picture with her gfs? If it's anything else, it's flat-out not explained. Then cut to MC getting bullied and maimed by other soldiers after MC was introduced as some badass. So along with pacing, timeline, and lore issues, this suffers from poor tone as well. You go from suffering in the wild, to demons(?) attacking, to Die Hard/Futurama references, melodrama, to bullying, and abuse all at drops of a hat.
After MC gets her arm cut off, it jumps back 12 hours, only to do yet another flashback inside the first one? And there's a choice that says the same nonsense word for both options?! Who is making this? And it's followed by MC spouting a bunch of movie references that somehow causes MC to create a religion somewhere because... reasons? And then Dione shows up and I swear no line of dialogue between MC and Dione has anything to do with the line before it because the conversation makes almost no sense. And then they talk about some random tournament THAT DOES NOT MATTER, and it's literally just a set up for a "joke" that's a reference to Naruto. My god. And it doesn't seem to get back to the present in this update, so in 12 hours MC moved in Dione, performed espionage about... something? Traveled to another continent (and back), reminisce with her twin, and reminisce and have sex with Meg (which creates further plot-holes).
The fact is, nothing about the writing makes any sense. And I'm sorry even my review even feels like it jumps from idea to idea too quickly, but these are all being paraphrased by me fairly chronologically.The only time I fully understand something, is when its a dumb reference to anime, movies, or songs. And when I do notice those (like the drawn out, DATED rip of Life is Beautiful) I just get annoyed or angry. Whoever has proofred any of this, improved nothing. Dev, you need to sit down with someone who ACTUALLY speaks English, tell them the story, and let them go over the dialogue with a fine toothed comb so any of this actually makes sense. As of right now, this is a disjointed mess and needs a serious rework. You can barely tell who's speaking, so many points in the narrative literally have no impact on the overall story, and if it does, the English is so poor it makes no sense. My advice, ONCE AGAIN, WRITE THIS IN YOUR LANGUAGE THEN HIRE A TRANSLATOR, AS NO ONE IS BENEFITTING FROM A VISUAL NOVEL THEY CAN'T READ.
So, in summary, I think I made it pretty clear how I feel about the English. The UI/UX is pretty much default Renpy outside of a few minor changes. The art is good, I mean most of the girls have that "inflated fake boobs" look, but it's a bunch of Daz assets, it's hard to make them look bad. The Dialogue and story you can barely read and I already did my tirade. So my opinion is low.
TO THE DEV: Hopefully you read this first, if you haven't already read the rest of this and are fuming at me. Hire someone to translate this for you. And I mean HIRE someone. Not a fan that says "Oh sure, I speak English" I mean someone that will actually make this a legible story. And if things change later I'll happily come back and change my review. Like I said before, the premise is interesting, "Post apocalyptic world with a race of people that are trying to save a dying planet." But it's suffering from everything else. Best of luck.