VN - Ren'Py - Give Me a Sun [v0.4.5] [Namco15]

I played for maybe half an hour and then had to stop because the English language and the quality of the dialogue are just not good enough. You can clearly see that GmaS wants to create a diverse world, with its own mythology and history, in which the "Witches" play a central role. But many dialogues simply seem infantile. This is partly due to the fact that the English language is very badly used, both in terms of the choice of words and grammar. I think if the developer were to run the texts through DeepL, it would immediately be a leap in quality. On the other hand, the style of the conversations seems very "childish", not how adults would converse.

And that really hurts both the atmosphere and pacing of the game. So much so that I only mention in an aside that the renders are really impressive, I like the transitions and fight scenes are well staged. There really could be a lot to be said for GmaS, but the linguistic shortcomings dramatically push the experience down.

The looks of this game are incredible, the renders look fabulous but the story seems a little odd so far. While the Setting of the story is really intruiging it is quite hard to follow. In this first version the story seems to jump around timelines really fast and its hard to follow how and why things are happening. The start seemed quite linear but then it went all over the place. I hope in future updates the story will be easier to follow because right now its pretty hard to immerse yourself in the game. Apart from that the game looks like it really has potential and got nice music and sound even tho the silent periods could be less and or shorter in my opinion.
Its definetly worth checking out and we will see where this goes

Played version 0.1

I don't get the story. Renders and poses are nice though.

The dialog, setting and story are really confusing to understand.
I'm totally lost as to what's going on with this setting. It gives the impression that the dev threw in every scenery they had available without much explanation as to why or how it fits together.

But let me start at the beginning: We're first left with two redhead sisters out in the wild hunting wildlife to survive. Let's call them Not-Aloy and Not-Aloy's sister. Okay, seems like a fantasy setting. Gotcha.
Not-Aloy's sister is playing with some weird future tech-tech device she traded for her gear. Okay, fantasy setting with ancient advanced tech or something. Not-Aloy fits right in. Gotcha.
They talk about some stories of a maker and some witches and we get to see some story delivered by an artful filter.
Then tech-tech device somehow creates a ruckus, which the sister somehow hears (despite being deaf as we're told later on) and that lures some monster that takes her... hostage(?). It's somehow intelligent or something.

Cue the sudden appearance and disappearance of our MC (or at least I think that was her), she literally just vanishes and reappears multiple times, killing the monster and strolling up to both girls in her tight biker / commando outfit like it's nothing. We exchange names and somehow those sisters' names are significant. So I guess she's some fetish magic witch, okay.
MC calls in some flying Uber drone service (I'm sorry, what?) to take sister away into some fabled tech-tech city. While that's happening we're being told the MC is a witch and she's able to sense emotions and has magic. Or something.
MC and Not-Aloy drive away on MC's bike (sure glad bikes are whisper quiet in the future) and end up in Night tech-tech city.
Both sisters just take all of this in stride having a shower and just accept that they're supposed to live here now. I'm officially confused.

The entire setting of the game now shifts. From this point on we're only following the MC in this tech-tech world. There's some backstory and flashbacks that follow but I'd given up at this point skipping through most of the barely understandable English dialog.
There's cosplaying in this world, real-world posters of games and computers, some form of witch police force, head sets and other tech-tech and yet characters have elf like features, magic abilities like being deaf and yet being able to hear and talk with people, regeneration abilities...
It's completely opposite to what's been shown in the intro with the sisters.

The dev seems really talented on the visual front but everything story related is a mess right now. I'll be sure to follow the progres. Lesbian harem games are really rare and I just hope the dev can find some help to make their story more understandable and coherent.

This gets a 3.5... The story and setting seem interesting and the renders are very good... But the English is bad and the story progression is very confusing... The bad English make the confusion even worse... If this can be improved this seems like a very interesting game...

An absolutely incredible start of a game (review as of v0.1)! The renders are amazing as can be seen in the preview pics but they are also part of a very original and intriguing story featuring a truly lovely protagonist in appearance as well as personality. If you're not instantly turned off by a female protagonist or the elven ears (which I myself was sceptical about!) and value girl-on-girl scenarios this is a must play and I'm really looking forward to how it continues!

Very beautiful, lot's of hot girls and fetishistic imagery. Also for first release this is very long.
However the game lacks focus, there are too many jumps in settings, too many characters. Scenes lead nowhere, when it get's interesting it just cuts to completely different scene.
But it sure has potential and is a feast for the eyes.
Rating based on V0.1

I don't like guys so only games with lesbian-exclusive characters do anythiing for me

But I just couldn't get into this one, the writing is atrocious. Maybe the plot and characters have something going for them, but it's really hard to tell when they're hidden beneath objectively bad writing filled with enough mistakes to make it incoherent.

Renders are fine, fetishes work for me but it feels like one of those machine translated games even though it isn't.

Pretty good renders and an interesting sci-fi setting. Really good demo. The only problem I can see so far is the planned kinks. A lesbian only focused game is quite niche imo.
I hope you find your target audience because you have a very promising game on your hands.

Normally, i have any interest in lesbian erotism. I like mainstream movie with lesbian theme, But see two girls fail for the flesh. My interest is under the minimal level.

I begin by tank @Namco15 for not going in a vulgar porn stuff but focus in erotims and sensuality and put priority in the story telling. The story have the first place and the MC do not fuck like a rabbit without reason. She is in relationship and in love. This is clearly show.

The developper take a lot of big risks and this time he paids.

The character of Celeste (The MC) is strong and weak in the same time. This is a simple clue of how rich and complex the story are.

In case is not still clear. I do not like lesbian stuff normally. But i'm, now, an unconditional fan of this story.

I can write a lot of stuff. But is already tell. I do not repeat what is already write. This time i do it short.

I finish by give to @Namco15 the biggest honor i can give. The storyteller title.

I played a lot of games here but only this game made me write a comment. I am incredibly amazed. I just lack of words to describe how much this game impressed me. There are a lot of good games no doubt, but this is something completely different level. Idk what exactly hit me so hard: fascinating graphics, fresh and interesting setting or complicated and intriguing plot with lots of stories behind it. Maybe all together. But im sure this is the best game i played from this website. And probably the only one i read from the first word to the last. I couldnt stop when i start the game until i finished it. As for the plot one of the great thing about it - its a perfect dosage of elements in it. There is epic stories, adventures, fightings, politics, humor, romance, light dialogues etc. All of them on their places and nothing is too much to make the story ridiculous. The plot unfolds with a lot of questions and understatements, keeping the intrigue. That makes me feel i am reading not some cringy words written just to show another porn scene, but something like a real literature, something really deep and worked out. I'm sure it even could be a foundation of a decent novel (i mean a book), if all of the storylines and backgrounds will be developed nicely.

This is not a porn game, this is a novel, where erotic is secondary to the plot. Honestly, i used to see this type of games focused on "serious" plot as a bad thing, because absolute majority are extremely stereotyped and boring. This is not the case. There are 2-3 games here when i felt something similar to this game in terms of storytelling, but neither of it had such great arts and twisted plot. Visually speaking there is a highest quality i have seen so far, incredible renders and characters. Erotic element are incredible too. I am not a fan of "lesbian-theme" but top quality renders make scenes very excited.

But i have to say, beside of delight author gave me with this game, i also felt deeply frustrated and even depressed at the end. You know, this feeling, when your favourite film, series or book finished. And the date December 2024 in the "future updates" section kills me completely. Its just very sad we have to wait such enormous time for continuation. It really hits badly when you get intrigued like hell and then you find out the next update will be in a 2.5 years. I know its good to make large updates, but if the waiting have to be such long, maybe it make sense to update more frequently but with less content? Just to feed the intrigue you make with the plot. By the way, this version (v0.1) took me a couple of hours, so this is not a demo - its a complete chapter.

Dont know how to play anything now. All of the games now look like some low-quality (in every aspect) clown porn compare to this. Yea, sorry for being hyped asf. I am really really hope we will see future updates as soon as possible.