About an hour in, and it has good art, good lore, and good characters. Unfortunately I am having one hell of a time keeping track of what the hell is going on. A few suggestions to the dev, if I may, that might make it easier to follow:
1) There are a lot of scenes with "Unknown" talking to "Unknown". I'm barely paying attention to the text for the first half of them because I am trying to figure out who is saying what-- having them both called the same thing does not help. Try using something descriptive ("blonde girl", "armed woman", whatever) so that we have a mental hook to hang things on as we are trying to learn these characters.
2) It might help to use text colors that are meaningful (i.e. helps us figure out who the speaker is in the image on the screen). Most characters seem to reuse orange and green, and there does not seem to be any particular meaning to that color.
3) There is a backward time jump that is somewhat confusing. For one thing, it's not entirely clear when it ends-- the MC. whom we thought was a badass, turns out to be weak and gets beaten up for no reason we can understand (lots of talk about characters we have not met yet), the there is a flashback and we meet a lot of characters. That was 30 minutes ago and I am not sure if I am still in the flashback or not. It would be helpful if when we move from scene to scene we got some kind of timestamp to tell us what is going on.... like, we meet Sidra-- ok, she's awesome-- and then this new person comes in and we have to decide if she is to be a roomie or not before we have any way of knowing who the heck she is, what our relationship is with her, etc. Was this happening 12 hours ago? A year ago? After the fight? It's fun to get a hot tsundere into the harem but some explanation would help a lot.
You start the game with a couple of outsiders, which is a great narrative device because they need the whole world explained to them, which helps the reader. But then the outsiders immediately vanish for some reason, and a ton more lore is thrown out with no real explanation. Don't get me wrong, it's interesting, it would just be more fun if it was presented in a way that was easier to follow.
Also, random feedback on some pronoun trouble: Scan your scripts for the word 'his'. About half of them should be 'her'.
