I'm also going to break my rule not to comment on "0.1.never-finished" versions polluting this site, but I believe an exception is warranted in the case of this game :
1/ bravo for picking Ren'Py as engine for your VN. It just makes sense. Anyone arguing otherwise can just kindly STFU. The reader in me appreciates your technical wisdom.
2/ don't apologize for your renders. They are of exceptional quality, definitely some of the best I have seen on this site. However you're probably correct in your assessment that polishing some of the English the game is currently written in would undoubtedly further enhance the pleasure of playing your game.
3/ it's so very refreshing to have what I am going to call a sexually mature author writing a smut game for once. There is so much that can be done once the mind is past the usual "female protagonist" tropes so commonly found in other games of this site, and this game exemplifies it perfectly.
(Sneak EDIT : ^ please see comment just above mine if anyone had any doubts about what I mean.)
4/ I love how you designed your main heroine, her girlfriend(s), the two "natives" that she elevated to immediate redhead glory status within the city, and almost all of the rest of the cast too. High quality stuff if I've ever seen any, and I'm usually not a big fan of 3D/DAZ renders, at all. I will however... not refrain from mentioning a slight concern that I may have about the author of this game being a tad too ambitious with the sheer *size* of the cast. There seem to be distracting beauties around every corner in the city in abundance, and as far as I can tell they all seem worth of full-fledged characterization (because otherwise they're just uninteresting pin-ups, which I don't think your game is about). It's only version 0.1, so I'm not sure how you're going to handle that.
5/ most importantly, this game deserves to reach the F95 firmament and remain there as an example for visual candy and elven lesbian ecstasy for a long time. Wishing you the best of luck in your endeavours, for your obviously generous and imaginative writing muse to stay at your side for a long while still, so that we all can enjoy the progress of your game in the future.
I am definitely looking forward to it.