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Funny you mention that, I'm actually the one proofreading it for now.This is a great idea. Just needs a little polish. Dialogue during the sex, at the very least for the first time, would be great. The dialogue really helps to give differentiation between the girls. Making Makoto shy about relationships seems great but the execution seems a tad sillier when she just has sex without a word. Not the Netori corruption trainer I desire, but it's pretty good as a concept anyway.
I recommend getting a proofreader to iron out the English, too.
This is a great idea. Just needs a little polish. Dialogue during the sex, at the very least for the first time, would be great. The dialogue really helps to give differentiation between the girls. Making Makoto shy about relationships seems great but the execution seems a tad sillier when she just has sex without a word. Not the Netori corruption trainer I desire, but it's pretty good as a concept anyway.
I recommend getting a proofreader to iron out the English, too.
Thanks for the feedback, I'll implement more dialogue in the future. The current dialogue will get fixed too.Oh yeah, absolutely add dialogue to your sex scenes. Unless the specific situation forbids it (and usually even then) Dialogue is always better than No Dialogue. Even if your two characters are having secret sex or whatever, having them whisper a bit to each other is just way better use of your word and time than just animating it.
Description is good too, even if it's describing stuff that's already on the screen.
Harem in Persona 4, you hurt the girls.But ... I did have a harem in Persona 5.
I had a harem for a long time.
Right up until Valentines day when they decided to turn on me and threaten me with chocolate and violence.
I think in Persona 4, it was more of "Guilt Tripping" you.Harem in Persona 4, you hurt the girls.
Harem in Persona 5, the girls hurt you.
You go through all your girlfriends, they give you chocolates and pretty much one by one ask you why they aren't good enough for you to hang out with on valentine's day. Pretty sure only one of them outright asks if you're cheating on them but they all know. Heck, I felt guilty just watching the scene on youtubeI think in Persona 4, it was more of "Guilt Tripping" you.
Oh it gets even better than that:You go through all your girlfriends, they give you chocolates and pretty much one by one ask you why they aren't good enough for you to hang out with on valentine's day. Pretty sure only one of them outright asks if you're cheating on them but they all know. Heck, I felt guilty just watching the scene on youtube