Ah damn, this update was such a tease...
It started like 5 different storylines but didn't finish any of them.
Sarah got more development and she really starts to embrace that sadist side of hers, but under a fixed ruleset now. I don't know if I like it or not, on one hand I like her as a character on the other hand it feels a little like her bad side is showing again. She's not a Yandere like Hazel, so her Sadism feels more "genuine" as a fetish, but stil. I also don't really like that Alice got "robbed" of her revenge, but she should just have played by the rules of the KNL and not straight up assault her.
I'd really love to see Yuki and Alice get a win for once, Yuki always gets to be the victim in the end. It would be nice to see her win for once, maybe through a plan that is so stupid that it couldn't fail. Would be great to see her defeat Hazel or Sarah, since those are the "smart" characters in the game (Not counting Leah and MC who are somehow adults in a place full of children)
I really liked the animated scene you made, although I prefer the good storytelling over an animated scene. Teasing Leah was also fun, but it's a little weird:
- The quest says it drops by 1 per hour, but that is not correct. It drops by 1 every time you skip time. If you sleep it drops by 1 and if you punish/reward/have sex it drops by 1 as well, although you pass more than 1 hour. I thought i had to finish it in a day at first because of the drop, but it wasn't that bad.
Daisy is an ambiguous character to me. I think she is a Voyeur, or at least I feel that was implied in the Barn scene. My feeling is that she's written to be a bad character, but I don't really want her to be the bad guy.
Scenes like the one with the Cat always pain me. To a reader it is clear that the cat is bad news, but our MC just shrugs his shoulders and goes to fuck Sonya in the barn the next day, where a wierd, maybe evil, cat roams around.
Overall this was one of my favourite updates so far, mainly because it had a lot of Sarah in it. She's my favourite character so far, not the most likeable, but the one with the most fleshed out personality so far.
Best scene was the determined Alice on the pier, but sadly she didn't get her revenge.
Things I wish would happen:
- Sarah getting outmaneuvered in a funny way by Alice
- Scarlet and Sarah rebonding storyline (and by bonding I mean friendship and not bondage, unless it's somehow related)
- Hazel interacting more with the other girls without being jealous all the time
- Daisy development. I really like her Eyes btw.
I hope the next update comes soon.