Still working on finishing the game so I don't have all the plot so far, just had some thoughts that I wanted to jot down:
Story is surprisingly good. I'm not really into NTR stuff but I decided to give this a shot, and I've enjoyed it well enough to go about five hours. There's a lot of interesting story seeds being planted that I hope pay off. It helps that the NTR scenarios are more complicated than "Hot asshole ruins a good dude's life because it's funny and hot"...
Except for Lepart, who is basically exactly that. Yes, there's some degree of mindbreak in the other stories, but for the most part the stories are either deserved, avoidable, or 'good' mindbreak where they're better off than how they were (Julia being broke, miserable, ostracized, bullied son/Yvet being in a poor dysfunctional family getting sold off/Mihra's extra comedy of the guy who cucked her childhood friend then getting cucked by you/the hero being a stupid asshole), Lepart is just sad; you progress her storyline & he's not a factor and the worst you've done is make her smell your dick...And then she half-breaks him into a miserable pet. Obviously he made a lot of mistakes, he shouldn't have deprived her of sex, he should have willingly put on the arm and lived his life, but it feels uniquely mean-spirited compared to the other stories.
The part that threw me off was how Mars immediately goes along with it. Yes, other people constantly call Mars a sleazeball murderer scumbag, and we hear about his offscreen exploits, but the actually seen actions and plot of the game suggests an introspective guy with a bad reputation who ends up cucking terrible people. Maybe some of the dialogue trees I didn't take reinforce a more assholish Mars, but the one I got doesn't come off as someone who'd go along with abusing Lepart for some pig pussy.
That said, it's an accomplishment when a porn story makes you feel something about the characters, especially one that only gets a single scene in-person before the reveal. I didn't write all this to go "I hate this, please change it" because I think that sort of kneejerk demand is awful for writing, but the option to be nicer to Lepart would be on my personal wishlist (Dev note mentioned the possibility of a path where Hilda doesn't get ahold of them, so maybe I just need to wait). Not necessarily idyllic "Mars fixes their relationship and they live happily ever after", but making Lepart a more willing partner (maybe even some 1-on-1 time) would be pleasant. Could even go the ironic route of Lepart & Iris swapping positions in the sub-pecking order (considering she's been the asshole in most of the scenes & the focus on how much of a lowly impulsive slut she is) but maybe that's just my bisexual interests invading a review.
In any case, definitely going to keep an eye on this. Most of the higher quality Western H-Games tends to be heavy on the granular gameplay mechanics with a limited/lighthearted story, interesting to see the inverse. It's also fun to see how the later art dramatically improves, in terms of shot composition & anatomy.
