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Hello, my dear friends! All my respect, Mr. DB! I’m sorry for the malicious silence, but I came back with a big bag of thoughts, because DB wrote that he would edit and rewrite some things. Alert! There're tons of text, even for me...
Some questions about plot
Suggestions
Simplifications of the scenes
What lines are better to delete completely
To improve realism
To improve the cinematography
Modeling, photoshoot and further relationship with Charlie
I didn't mean to offend you in any way. If I did - I'm sorry, I didn't mean it like that. I hope these notes will help you, DB.
You did a real good job, well done!
Some questions about plot
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I didn't mean to offend you in any way. If I did - I'm sorry
, I didn't mean it like that. I hope these notes will help you, DB.You did a real good job, well done!
Cheers,
Pristis.Microdon
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100% yes. No harem, no fucking of random broads. Just sweet old monogamy
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well besides kaylah who isn't li (not sure when her sexscene is supposed to happen), maybe 3some with suzie and her friend.100% yes. No harem, no fucking of random broads. Just sweet old monogamy
To Pristis.Microdon,
Your critic is insightful and sensitive. This kind of constructed critic will level the game for amazing to legendary. I admire your meticulous work. I would add a different level of reactions by Charlotte when it comes to PTSD reactions. Hearing the name (Jason) is an external cue that elicit a startle response. However, see him at the party should elicit a very strong reaction (Elevated startle response, heightened sense of threat). In addition, I would have add a few dissociative behaviors along the story to show Charlotte's PTSD reactions.
Finally, I think that the MC had to give the phone directly to Suzi. However, I would have change the scene that he will not have to enter the women changing room. This will be more realistic.
Again, I bow my head in great appreciation to your wonderful critic.
@Pristis.Microdon and @DB, I wish my graduate students were nearly as competent as you both are.
Sorry for reiterate myself, kudos to you!
J.
Your critic is insightful and sensitive. This kind of constructed critic will level the game for amazing to legendary. I admire your meticulous work. I would add a different level of reactions by Charlotte when it comes to PTSD reactions. Hearing the name (Jason) is an external cue that elicit a startle response. However, see him at the party should elicit a very strong reaction (Elevated startle response, heightened sense of threat). In addition, I would have add a few dissociative behaviors along the story to show Charlotte's PTSD reactions.
Finally, I think that the MC had to give the phone directly to Suzi. However, I would have change the scene that he will not have to enter the women changing room. This will be more realistic.
Again, I bow my head in great appreciation to your wonderful critic.
@Pristis.Microdon and @DB, I wish my graduate students were nearly as competent as you both are.
Sorry for reiterate myself, kudos to you!
J.
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Charlotte is disgusted.
Because it wouldn't make sense at all in the story. This is a story with adult elements, not a fap fest loosely woven together with some words to call it a story.
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MC did something she didn't like and she made another few steps back in their relationship.
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Yes, agree. But it's curious that you find sad that Zak didn't fuck everything that moves but not the fact that a knife was in his guts... Yes, that's not sad at all...
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A harem would destroy the story. It wouldn't make sense here. There are good harem AVN's. Just play them and accept not every AVN is about special fetishes.
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Need a merch store with Hillside:
1. Tee shirts.
2. Bath towels.
3. Action figures. (including Zak with a knife in him and a stupid look on his face)
4. Hats.
5. Lunch boxes.
6. Coffee/beverage cups.
etc.
Some of the artwork would have quotes from the VN (funny or otherwise).
1. Tee shirts.
2. Bath towels.
3. Action figures. (including Zak with a knife in him and a stupid look on his face)
4. Hats.
5. Lunch boxes.
6. Coffee/beverage cups.
etc.
Some of the artwork would have quotes from the VN (funny or otherwise).
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sorry man, hold out hope for July 2026 though, DB said his next updates comin a few months after that.
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Just holding out hope for a dev with any semblance of integrity. Enjoy those patreon dollars while it lasts.
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I really like that this isn't a harem game
Monogamy all the way for this dude
Monogamy all the way for this dude
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What's your mission, dude? Everytime I see a posting from you, you're crying like an infant who dropped his lollypop in a dog-doo.
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