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- Jul 3, 2021
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- Feb 26, 2021
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This character is very attractive. So far, though, she's been rather one-dimensional as a raging biotch. Interested to see where the character goes... in my humble opinion she could really use a tad more complexity.
- Nov 14, 2017
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if only there was search to find what's after.
Be careful with suggestions about story - a game which is susceptible to suggestion by committee will end up satisfying no-one. You may already know this - and technical advice can only help, but be wary and stick to your original vision. You are building (also have built) a unique and compelling story which has gained popularity. Please don't waver, you are doing it right, remain committed and see this through. Keep the advice for other stories/games/VNs for the future.
- Mar 13, 2021
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Glad to see that I'm not the only one who thinks Suzi has been neglected by our dev pal.
- Nov 1, 2017
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I think one of the problems with her story is that she didn't want help even though she probably needed it more than anybody else in the VN. She sees a helping hand as a slap in the face. It is a quality that she shares with her mother but Charli had Lucy to talk some sense into her. Her friend in the locker room tried with Suzi but as they say in Spain she has the ears of a donkey. Suzi's story has been spinning its wheels because she is intractable and truculent. Until the dev gives her some character development she is going to remain in this limbo.
Glad to see that I'm not the only one who thinks Suzi has been neglected by our dev pal.
- Jun 8, 2021
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I think dev said he is going to change some parts of the older chapters to make suzi more involved, or "fix" her or something. I tried to find the post but alas my search was fruitless
Thanks, keefer.
Don't worry, the story is basically written and I'm not really seeking suggestions regarding that (although I will always consider them). I'm looking to fix content that is already there, but which has been badly done. And while I generally know what needs fixing, it's always useful to hear others' feedback too.
- Mar 25, 2021
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That is another reason this dev is one of the best
I have seen countless games suffer late in development because the devs had no idea of where to take the story
or things like that.
I have seen some truly ridiculous things lol
But here the dev obviously has a clear vision of where the story is going, I really like that.
I have seen countless games suffer late in development because the devs had no idea of where to take the story
or things like that.
I have seen some truly ridiculous things lol
But here the dev obviously has a clear vision of where the story is going, I really like that.
- Jun 11, 2017
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Hi, guys.
As I said in the last update, from now on I will be posting the usual progress report, and preview images for $5+ patrons.
However, as I'm still reworking some things, I'll only post two preview images per week for now.
Thanks,
DB
- Charlotte and the MC chat while waiting for someone to join them
- Emma sleeps in someone else's bed again
Really thought that We saving Emma from the Police Chief would be the breaking point where our actions would overwhelm her biases and she would soften up, i was terribly disappointed instead.
- Mar 25, 2021
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I really like that Emma is a slow burn romance
The payoff at the end is always better when they are.
The payoff at the end is always better when they are.
- Jun 14, 2020
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I don't know. Emma's acting like an 14yrs old girl. She's clearly not mature. MC is an adult. I can't see how a man of integrity and with morale standards like MC could consider a relationship with a child. Her body might be old enough but her mind isn't.
- Nov 15, 2020
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Well said. But so far, the dev has not let us down with the story.
It will be very interesting to see how that will be handled.
- Apr 24, 2020
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In another thread, I talked about placing a Las Vegas bet on who would have vaginal sex first:
Nana (Grandma's House), or
Kindra (Artemis)
Emma could definitely be added to that wager.
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you might be right about the first one, but Emma lies clearly in Charlotte's bed, as MC hasn't got the silver bedware