I told in that thread that I would try to write a continuation story for the little scene I wrote for Hermione, but it can probably be used for another girl. I thought it would take a couple of days, well… more like 3 weeks. I sent the story to the game dev and I will explain here what I think I’ve learnt from that, if anyone is interested. Like everything, it’s once you did something that you know how you should have done it instead.
At the beginning I tried to match the classic pattern of corruption games: once a girl does a specific thing (being naked, blowjob, …) she’s open to do more of the same and that specific action can be repeated. I’m not so convinced anymore it’s a good idea to have “tier” like this. The justification to make the girl goes that step further has to work for the scene but for all the other of the same category as well, you can’t make it exceptional and unique. It bars you from a lot of interesting stories and you can’t use the uniqueness of an event as an argument to try to convince the girl to do it “just this once”. Furthermore, the corruption of the girl can only go forward, a girl cannot have sex then change her mind thinking it was a bad idea. Yet, having second thought would make the convincing of the girl more realistic and show she’s really reluctant and hesitant.
A scene doesn’t really work if the girl has/had no way to avoid her fate. The girl should be nudged just enough to fall, not be crushed by the inevitable. It’s not specific to corruption games, in all stories the antagonist must be at least on a par with the protagonist, if the antagonist has no way to win there is no thrill. In fact, the girl should also get a few victories from time to time to make the story less predictable and thus more interesting.
For that reason, I believe it’s quite hard to make the goal of Marcus obvious to the girl right from the start. If he is openly a pervert trying to get into her pants she will either do everything she can do to avoid that and she has to be put in a no win scenario, or she will accept to sell her body which would mean she’s already a slut.
Therefore, I chose to make Marcus looks like he behaves as a professional. It’s quite easy to advance in that direction until the girl is naked because there are a lot of pretexts that can be used for that (the humility of nakedness, the compliance with Nature, the artistic beauty of the human body, the removal of all signs of hierarchy, etc.). I guess it can be pushed to massage sessions, or even to massage sessions where Marcus’s hands slide between the girl’s legs to masturbate her. But after that it’s really hard to find a half-decent reason for the girl to do a blowjob or something. It took me 3 long scenes and more than 2,000 words to go from a trained-to-be-naked girl to a blowjob, and even then, the justification was suspicious. Especially to repeat the scene since at that point the story had reached the “blowjob tier”.
So, rather than having Marcus trying to convince the girl by himself like I did, which means having a story for each girl matching her personality, I would suggest another approach, to have a “Game of Thrones” among the girls.
That would solve one of the two big problems I had, finding compelling arguments to go ever further.
That’s it. It was fun to do but I wouldn’t do it again anytime soon, I spent way too much time on this but I discovered it surprisingly difficult to write a good story (it’s almost as if being a writer is a job). I guess I’ll see in one year or so if any of my advices has been deemed useful.
At the beginning I tried to match the classic pattern of corruption games: once a girl does a specific thing (being naked, blowjob, …) she’s open to do more of the same and that specific action can be repeated. I’m not so convinced anymore it’s a good idea to have “tier” like this. The justification to make the girl goes that step further has to work for the scene but for all the other of the same category as well, you can’t make it exceptional and unique. It bars you from a lot of interesting stories and you can’t use the uniqueness of an event as an argument to try to convince the girl to do it “just this once”. Furthermore, the corruption of the girl can only go forward, a girl cannot have sex then change her mind thinking it was a bad idea. Yet, having second thought would make the convincing of the girl more realistic and show she’s really reluctant and hesitant.
A scene doesn’t really work if the girl has/had no way to avoid her fate. The girl should be nudged just enough to fall, not be crushed by the inevitable. It’s not specific to corruption games, in all stories the antagonist must be at least on a par with the protagonist, if the antagonist has no way to win there is no thrill. In fact, the girl should also get a few victories from time to time to make the story less predictable and thus more interesting.
For that reason, I believe it’s quite hard to make the goal of Marcus obvious to the girl right from the start. If he is openly a pervert trying to get into her pants she will either do everything she can do to avoid that and she has to be put in a no win scenario, or she will accept to sell her body which would mean she’s already a slut.
Therefore, I chose to make Marcus looks like he behaves as a professional. It’s quite easy to advance in that direction until the girl is naked because there are a lot of pretexts that can be used for that (the humility of nakedness, the compliance with Nature, the artistic beauty of the human body, the removal of all signs of hierarchy, etc.). I guess it can be pushed to massage sessions, or even to massage sessions where Marcus’s hands slide between the girl’s legs to masturbate her. But after that it’s really hard to find a half-decent reason for the girl to do a blowjob or something. It took me 3 long scenes and more than 2,000 words to go from a trained-to-be-naked girl to a blowjob, and even then, the justification was suspicious. Especially to repeat the scene since at that point the story had reached the “blowjob tier”.
So, rather than having Marcus trying to convince the girl by himself like I did, which means having a story for each girl matching her personality, I would suggest another approach, to have a “Game of Thrones” among the girls.
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That would solve one of the two big problems I had, finding compelling arguments to go ever further.
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That’s it. It was fun to do but I wouldn’t do it again anytime soon, I spent way too much time on this but I discovered it surprisingly difficult to write a good story (it’s almost as if being a writer is a job). I guess I’ll see in one year or so if any of my advices has been deemed useful.
