Miðgarðsormr

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Oct 1, 2017
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A professional editor for the amount of text is 10k, a real rework from a professional writer is way beyond that. The issue with people offering free help, even as a professional writer, they have far less game experience or programming etc. You have to work with text that sits within code, every time someone offers to help, and see's the code and flow... they bomb hard.

While I can and will go back and revisit the previous texts, having people tell me to do it while progressing the story is unrealistic. People thinking that I am against critiques are completely wrong, it's just so much to take in all at once. Look how many pages in this thread since release. I am but a mere human, sorry.
Thats why i said more then some pointers and some tips are pretty hard on everyones skill who could help you in this forum. Not only is the price a huge one but to actually find a writer that knows about game developing and rewrite stuff inside the code or knows stuff about programming at all while still not charging a fortune to do so should be an impossible task.

Of course its unrealistic to want you to do all that while still working on the game but what i learned from this forum or gaming in general is that ppl demand (not want) stuff yesterday and get mad as fuck if you dont deliver. So pleasing the demand of gamers is an impossible task.

I didnt mean to offend you and maybe i did, if so i apologize of course but to me it appeard that way that you are not interested in critique. Sorry about that as well.

Maybe we could arrange a suggestion thread or if that is not up to the rules of the forum a kind of formattin of the text so you could check on suggestions alone while not reading through the entire thread/forum to adress them. Just an idea.
 

JoeBanks

Innocent Witches/Not Another Adventurer!
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May 5, 2018
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Thats why i said more then some pointers and some tips are pretty hard on everyones skill who could help you in this forum. Not only is the price a huge one but to actually find a writer that knows about game developing and rewrite stuff inside the code or knows stuff about programming at all while still not charging a fortune to do so should be an impossible task.

Of course its unrealistic to want you to do all that while still working on the game but what i learned from this forum or gaming in general is that ppl demand (not want) stuff yesterday and get mad as fuck if you dont deliver. So pleasing the demand of gamers is an impossible task.

I didnt mean to offend you and maybe i did, if so i apologize of course but to me it appeard that way that you are not interested in critique. Sorry about that as well.

Maybe we could arrange a suggestion thread or if that is not up to the rules of the forum a kind of formattin of the text so you could check on suggestions alone while not reading through the entire thread/forum to adress them. Just an idea.
Time versus development, I can't even explain the amount of tasks I take on plus holding a full time job. I don't mind suggestions, the problem is I have to go in and do a lot of the work. I started to rework chapter 4, the flow of the game is horrible right now. The core of the game needs a rework to full flesh everything out without breaking it further.

Unfortunately at this point in the development process, old writing will be secondary. We have a chapter skip option for this reason. I do have a task list and plans, there is a structure and method, I can communicate it, but none of that will help in the short run. Let us get another 2 releases with lewd scenes out the door, have some stable lewd additions and quell the largest portion of complaints, play time versus reward.

People can hit ctrl and just skip all the text, and most probably do :p
 

diggles99

New Member
Sep 22, 2019
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Question, Is there anything new with Daphne? I mean i have 50 streak guessing her underwear... I Saw all her undies yet
If you've guessed the burnished color three times in a row you've see as much as you're goin to see in the minigame. Apparently if you buy the $1000 bathwater from the magazine and throw it on her you get to see her tits but my game is bugged to where i cant grad papers so I havent verified that yet.
 

alm@

New Member
Feb 3, 2018
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hey how can i remove things from the bag. I want get get rid of things. dragging out site does work.
 

anuragk

Member
Dec 28, 2018
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What about hermionie. Is she covering her boobs the last thing. I reached hard level 3. Is it the end or something else as well
 
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kitsunedawn

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Its actually pretty hard for a pro writer to help here.
I dont know who else is a professional writer in this forum aside from me but to actually work on this game (story wise) would cost the dev a pretty penny which i highly doubt the dev team would pay to actually rise this story to something lets say more substantial.
You are correct for the most part.

Generally speaking, I could probably help some in the dialogue, helping things flow a bit better between the characters, or making things feel more 'alive' so to speak; in doing so correcting or addressing some of the way the writing seems a touch stilted or forced in places. Overall though, there isn't much I could do, without completely rewriting the entire story. Problem is, doing that would be both costly for a developer; and also push the development cycle back considerably. Like you said basically said, it really comes down to a question of cost. Is it worth it to shell out the cash for a rewrite that gives more substance to the story, while pushing the development cycle further back; or can they better deal with things as they are now?
 
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Traducir del: Inglés

540/5000



Once you have guessed the right answer and unlocked the diary, you will need to put it back in her dorm before she finds out. Then you will need to summon Ginny informally in a way that pleases her. Either send a Flying Flaun, used influence or have your brutality level 6. To get anything from the market, you need to read, “Bitches love gifts” above.
Once you have done this, she will arrive and you will talk to her about why she cannot focus, however, she will dismiss your idea as a joke.

Do you know how to get this for Ginny?
 
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Only problem here is that this game is not a VN, this is a full fledge porn game, with little porn content AND a LOT of minigames. The art is really, like really great, all people get sell by the art, but once u try the game is not what u expect it to be.

The game mechanics, the hard and LONG the game is without any reward (sex scene), the need for a walktrough (yes, step by step for people who come here beliving this was a VN, not the 'guide' this game have) make this game one that i don´t want to replay never again.

I feel kind of robbed of my time, so much potential, pretty much the game could have end up better with more use of SEX and less minigames. For fuck sake this game have like 3 years in development (or at least it start around that time, how many time it have being in onhold, idk) and we still don't have a sex scene with the 'main girls'.

Just hope for the author to actually reward the players or advance the story, because all the the story up to this point feel like a very big filler, not even Naruto...
 

jonL

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Jul 24, 2017
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Yeah. All this dumb grind, grindy puzzels and grindy quests. The only good part right now is ginny route, being short and rewarding. Also she had better, less akabur, art style.
 

TheVicarious

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Nov 19, 2017
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Can someone please help me with the Swimsuit shit? I can't progress, I watch the videos and read the walkthorugh but I don't understand anything. When I am to "create" their swimsuit with the hat who shall have what size? How can I return everything on one sunday? I can only visit three places. Jesus why in gods god damn name is this so complicated, with NO REWARDS :S
 
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madmewmew

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Sep 24, 2017
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ive selected concede many times for 5x5 and still i dont see the cheat button.. only focus 1 focus 2 or keep trying
 
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