VN Ren'Py Innocent Witches [v0.12 Alpha] [Sad Crab]

[Darian4]

TLDR; All valid points, the harry pottter one? ehh okay, we can point it out but the castle is color coded etc.

I'm not talking about the castle wings, I mean we need a reminder when we ask Minerva mc Donagall to visit a dorm. We can ask her to go to Griffindor and Ravenclaw but we can’t ask her to visit Daphne’s room for instance. A simple reminder in brackets in the dialogue choices with Minerva would be good enough:
“Visit Griffindor’s dorm (Hermione’s)”

By the way, although the girls indeed talk about their color (Hermione says her color is red if I remember correctly) that information is lost into the HUGE info dump at the beginning and I didn’t pay attention enough to keep it in mind. The color system is a clever way to keep track of each girl but since that information is quite useful you should make it stands out better, either with a panel in the office or a document in the office’s bookcase telling “that color is associated with that girl and that house” so we can’t miss or forget it.

If people want to throw dialogue at me in PM's I won't refuse[…]
I am not above having help, I will definitely take up offers for such things if it's free and the quality is good.

I’m currently trying to write a story of the corruption of a girl (I’m continuing with Hermione but I guess it can be adapted for another girl like Ginny) which I will send you in hopefully less than a week. I dare to think it’s better than all the corruption processes I’ve seen in such games but it’s quite long, 7.000 to 10.000 words to go from Hermione reluctantly showing some skin after her defeat to her doing anal. The biggest problem though is it’s written as a domino effect, each step leading to the other, meaning it will probably be quite hard to pick the story apart and stich it with other ideas. Well, you’ll see if you can do anything with it.

Let me use the Akabur Witch Trainer as an example because I assume we all played that game.[…]
- What Hermione wants = school points = Grifindor in lead[…]
Game had simple rules, interesting story.

I agree with almost everything you said except with what point. The idea of Hermione slowly becoming a prostitute just for points for her house is really a stretch and it makes the whole story predictable and uninteresting from the beginning. Also, the player has almost nothing to do but keep promising to give her more points.

To keep a story interesting the same incentive shouldn’t be used over and over again. The reason for the girl to go further into corruption should evolve as the story goes.

Spoiler: Quick example for a game story

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Once again, the problem is not the story being too long, it’s the long text being too irrelevant.

 

[et5482015]

Does 0.3F have a sex scene?
I think it should not be four heroines, and other female characters, such as minerva or xandria, and Ginny and Nola have no good feelings.
Ask the creator, will the final version be more than version 1.0?

 

[cxx]

mc gounagall's rapescene.

 

[publicenemy4345]

mc gounagall's rapescene.

wait u serious? this is gonna be 0.3F scene? holy what a joke

 

[pothb]

Nah, he's either replying to someone else or misread your post.

The speculated scene is Ginny BJ. It's something JoeBanks has posted a blurry image of, either here or the patreon or discord or random website #69.

 

[JoeBanks]

wait u serious? this is gonna be 0.3F scene? holy what a joke

Scene with Ginny, not macgon... That scenes been old.

CCX replied about 0.3F but was probably thinking 0.3b

 

[cxx]

outide bjs, wanks and teases only actual sexscene is that rapeish scene early game.

 

[anuragk]

only 1 scene. nothing more with the 4 main characters??

 

[cxx]

only some nudity i think, no sex on this version.

 

[DatDrak]

This game is beautiful but OMFG it's liek a giant grind for nothing!!!!

It takes forever to anything(Both gold and stats take forever to build up) and there are like... almost no hints on what to do next. AND the walkthrough(The only one I can find), is not much help.

I think this is an insanely good game, the art and mechanics(aside from being too grindy) are pretty good. It just needs to be a bit more simple.

 

[JoeBanks]

This game is beautiful but OMFG it's liek a giant grind for nothing!!!!

It takes forever to anything(Both gold and stats take forever to build up) and there are like... almost no hints on what to do next. AND the walkthrough(The only one I can find), is not much help.

I think this is an insanely good game, the art and mechanics(aside from being too grindy) are pretty good. It just needs to be a bit more simple.

Yeah, there's a save with maxed stats already in this forum. With regards to gold, that will be much easier in 0.3f

 

[Jasticus]

To keep people interested, it might be best to do like Tatinek mentioned last page where you can quickly get right into the gameplay and the girls coming to him with problems. Sort of a 'Mom doesn't want to do this with me (headmaster) so I'm coming to ask Dad instead (Marcus)' and then you as Marcus will help them out assuming they are willing to 'play along'.

The pensieve is an interesting idea for the saves, but as a suggestion - put the 'Story' like the 2 hour prologue into the pensieve. Make it optional to view for more backstory details. Have people save their game using the bookshelf instead. This way those who want story can get plenty of story and don't have to go through it over and over and over again with each update - and those who just want gameplay can just do the gameplay.

I'll admit I was a patron for a few years up until a couple months ago when I felt like there was just a whole lot of nothing to show for progress for a long time. If I see a legitimate uptick in gameplay progression in the future I will probably return.

I kinda wish I knew Russian so I could help with the translation because sometimes I would just stare in confusion at what was trying to be said.

 

[Leobbb]

Some criticism, hope you can take it.

Why the UI has to be so frustrating?

Can't you put swimsuits into types? Like standard, standard adult, swimming, yoga and so on? So you can just click on a type, then click on the girl's name to see respective design which changes for every girl and then you can ask to get it? Because this is how it actually works when you ask the hat for a swimsuit, design or at least color changes for every girl, but currently it's very confusing as you display multiple designs that lead to the same result and result can be different from what is displayed. You could even make it a requirement to identify every combination first to make it available for copying excluding Hermione's fav of course which should be unlocked through story. Also this redesign would free a lot of swimsuit slots in the crafting window for future types if you decide to add some, though there is more than enough right now compared to other more important content.

Why do guests have freedom to randomly choose hours they come to visit? This is not how appointments work in real life and it makes planning frustrating as hell. Sure you are stripped of any real power for blueballing reasons but students coming whenever they feel like is a bit too much. To add to the insult girls explicitly tell you hours they should be available, like Hermione says "I am free to come from 3pm to 5pm" and then when you mail her she comes randomly between 5pm and 9pm like she completely forgot what she said or she doesn't care about her schedule. It would be easy to integrate mail window with a clock, simply highlighting times green when someone can come and displaying red when they are busy or not willing to come or whatever. And maybe different color for official and casual meetings. And then you click on the hour to confirm the meeting. This way you won't have the feeling of wasted time every day and that the game tries to cheat you.

Ok so you can train stats once a day with a bonus for brutality (should be power really) if the window is open, bonus for perception if the fire is lit, bonus for control if the curtains are closed and final bonus for intellect if you have trained intellect today already. Now that is some interesting logic because you can't train twice a day.

There are spaghetti scenario progress requirements with a web of intertwining routes, which were probably meant to be separate and I was doing minigames in Ch4 to learn they are main content of Ch5. It turns out seeing the swimsuits is the only real Ch5 content right now. Not sure why the unisex design was lost after being the main plot device for Ch4 ending but somehow I could get it back from Hermione Phoenix scene which looked like one of the missed Ch4 routes.

Overall the art in the game is top quality, one of the best I've ever seen. You could easily reach or even surpass mity, which runs similar style game in earnings, but compared to their game pacing of the H content (or rather lack of it) and overall blueballing is extremely bad. The game already has too much content that takes a lot of time without any gratification. You could easily double your income if you focused on fixing that. Even half of one girl route would be something, probably Hermione for a start. Alternatively you could at least make it less tedious to repeatably get softcore content already included and don't stupidly block it like no more asking for supplies from Amelia. Why isn't dialogue about Helena separated from that is hard to understand.

 

[Jon Humbert]

Hey Joe, when 0.3F will came? I want to awake tomorrow with red news...

 

[sentientarrow]

What this gives you: A mountain of text, carpal tunnel from the grind, and only seeing an occational titty.
Such a waste of potential. It takes way too long to get way too little.

Could someone just put a full save in the original post?

 

[et5482015]

It’s almost the end of the month and the beginning of the month. I don’t know if 3.0F will come out?

Wrong is 0.3F version

 

[cxx]

3.0F is years away, 0.3F might come inside few weeks.

 

[Ankry]

А будут ли какие то дополнения к веткам главных героинь или всё обновление будет сконцентрировано на Джини?

 

[cxx]

same in english.

 

[Ankry]

And will there be any additions to the branches of the main characters or the entire update will be focused on Ginny?