- Aug 18, 2020
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I am just getting started, I think your English is fine and understandable, what is amusing is the cadence and structure of sentences, it is wonderful. I feel I am talking with a Indian mate from my past, and his family, or my doctor, or some store owner family when shopping. People that whine and complain about this may want to travel, and get of their tiny bubble(s). Experience other cultures, languages and how business or trades are done. Let me follow up by saying the traditional American culture can be fine too, not telling people its bad like many fools out there want to destroy all history, good or bad. You must learn from the past, so you don't fall into the same old traps. Now to playing your game...
Player should play in Auto mode to not miss verbal dialogue (non English) but tone and amplitude add value. Spelling "staright" change to "straight" (text edit, find replace). Why was MOM wearing finger "cots" (when the MC returned home from shopping with sister for contact lenses)? If its supposed to be nail polish, you need to fix those images to just the finger nails. A bit too many single press button fields, add a few more scenes that change a result from a choice. Later, introduce a clickable gallery, so players can remind themselves who the various characters are names, and relationships to the MC. Why the exaggeration about heaviness of folded laundry in basket to carry upstairs? If they were wet and the drier was down, and it had to be carried to line dry, and then to her for ironing I suppose. If they were full length clothes reems and three stacked I could see it. But it's just two columns of folded towels or material.
I am using the single button press prompts as saves to take me back to story progress points for now. Replace "caught" with "catch" (Riya can caught both of us again). Funny: Housekeeper and MC do it so often, when does she get her work done? She keeps wanting creampies, I wonder if she is gold-digging the family.
Improve writing skills: example.. Back when TV repairman came to house and housewife bends over looking for money in her purse lower than her waist. The TV repairman, aggressively comes behind lifts her dress and bangs her joyfully, while the housewife made small protests at first. You could do that with the housemaid, in the kitchen drops to pick up something or looking through cabinets... This is the general idea, go back to when you were a teen fantasizing about situations. Or real situations that you would have gone further given circumstances, modify some to fit your story. It need more than it has currently in sexy appeal. The rescue of the woman from aggression, needs a bit more progression, they feel obligated and like protectors... Seduction, I let you figure that out.
MC naked under blanket at Aunty house, but wakes up after BJ, wearing shorts before looking for her.
Comedy: When you use "a few minutes later" do it with a French accent audio clip, it's funny as hell. You did make a funny scene, take a risk with Disha, on a bunk bed set up. Like a person above wouldn't notice. I have super sense of smell, and walking into a room that someone had sex in, or that I had... and some don't notice (Captain Oblivious levels). On sis creampie, she asks did he, and my response would be, oops my bad. Tug at their funny bones, women like smart fun men.
Graphics error, apparent cum floating in air not attached to the tattooed girl or the MC pecker, after copulation at the secret warehouse. Also, she gets awfully friendly, so is that an arousal chemical plant? Might need to justify, her going nympho no risk MC.
Funny: You could add a narrator voice saying: Such a good Lad, always licking it before sticking it. Another suggestion, on some of the creampies, have the female walking away with cum dripping down her snatch all the way to her knees. That is hot. I always enjoyed Creampies followed with the eager twat sucking me dry, or to get another round right away. I think I will shut up now.
Player should play in Auto mode to not miss verbal dialogue (non English) but tone and amplitude add value. Spelling "staright" change to "straight" (text edit, find replace). Why was MOM wearing finger "cots" (when the MC returned home from shopping with sister for contact lenses)? If its supposed to be nail polish, you need to fix those images to just the finger nails. A bit too many single press button fields, add a few more scenes that change a result from a choice. Later, introduce a clickable gallery, so players can remind themselves who the various characters are names, and relationships to the MC. Why the exaggeration about heaviness of folded laundry in basket to carry upstairs? If they were wet and the drier was down, and it had to be carried to line dry, and then to her for ironing I suppose. If they were full length clothes reems and three stacked I could see it. But it's just two columns of folded towels or material.
I am using the single button press prompts as saves to take me back to story progress points for now. Replace "caught" with "catch" (Riya can caught both of us again). Funny: Housekeeper and MC do it so often, when does she get her work done? She keeps wanting creampies, I wonder if she is gold-digging the family.
Improve writing skills: example.. Back when TV repairman came to house and housewife bends over looking for money in her purse lower than her waist. The TV repairman, aggressively comes behind lifts her dress and bangs her joyfully, while the housewife made small protests at first. You could do that with the housemaid, in the kitchen drops to pick up something or looking through cabinets... This is the general idea, go back to when you were a teen fantasizing about situations. Or real situations that you would have gone further given circumstances, modify some to fit your story. It need more than it has currently in sexy appeal. The rescue of the woman from aggression, needs a bit more progression, they feel obligated and like protectors... Seduction, I let you figure that out.
MC naked under blanket at Aunty house, but wakes up after BJ, wearing shorts before looking for her.
Comedy: When you use "a few minutes later" do it with a French accent audio clip, it's funny as hell. You did make a funny scene, take a risk with Disha, on a bunk bed set up. Like a person above wouldn't notice. I have super sense of smell, and walking into a room that someone had sex in, or that I had... and some don't notice (Captain Oblivious levels). On sis creampie, she asks did he, and my response would be, oops my bad. Tug at their funny bones, women like smart fun men.
Graphics error, apparent cum floating in air not attached to the tattooed girl or the MC pecker, after copulation at the secret warehouse. Also, she gets awfully friendly, so is that an arousal chemical plant? Might need to justify, her going nympho no risk MC.
Funny: You could add a narrator voice saying: Such a good Lad, always licking it before sticking it. Another suggestion, on some of the creampies, have the female walking away with cum dripping down her snatch all the way to her knees. That is hot. I always enjoyed Creampies followed with the eager twat sucking me dry, or to get another round right away. I think I will shut up now.
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- Jun 19, 2019
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This comment is now in fact ironic because as of Monday 13th Feb 2023 I have started to learn Hindi.
Namaste, Kya ap accha? (Hello, are you good?)
- May 26, 2017
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- Apr 4, 2020
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Man oh man, this game is really one heck of a f**kfest.
Story is not that much but those sexy animations and poses are really good especially from ep 6 onwards.
Only thing i want to say to the dev is just make sure you give priority to story also in your upcoming games.
Thank you for this game.
Story is not that much but those sexy animations and poses are really good especially from ep 6 onwards.
Only thing i want to say to the dev is just make sure you give priority to story also in your upcoming games.
Thank you for this game.
- Apr 4, 2020
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- May 8, 2018
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playing through 1-5 so far and man the dialogue is just atrocious, some of the scenes mismatch with the events so badly its not even comical, and clothes disappear and reappear during and after sex scenes
its tolerable overall mainly because of the themes but its execution leaves alot to be desired
its tolerable overall mainly because of the themes but its execution leaves alot to be desired
I hardly think so...
Indian porn industry gets affected by pirates and people like us who always looking for free stuff .. I am quite surprised how savita bhabhi survived this long
