I must tell that I was very disappointed by the plot. I mean, you are the villain of a story taking place in the universe of Naruto. Main antagonists of this universe include mythical figures like Orochimaru, the Akatsuki and Madara Uchiha.
Your avatar is supposed to be a coldhearted child abuser and the future master of Konoha. Yet, he is so weak and pathetic that he needs to be given powers from nowhere to achieve something? He can't even figure out his own evil plan without grandpa holding him by the hand?
For me, this was just unacceptable. So, I have decided to write my own version of the story:
-You still begin your story as an orphan who has never achieved much in life.
-One day, a teenager who has the ascendancy over you, announces to you that he is your brother and that you must work with him to rebuild your clan.
-The years pass, your brother takes many lovers but ruins all your chances of doing the same, your frustration leads you to despise women.
-In Boruto's era, your brother suddenly disappears before reappearing a few days later. He tells you that he has traveled to the sanctuary of your ancient village and has unearthed the knowledge of a forbidden technique that allows him to control people. He intends to use it to raise an army and take control of the village.
-However, Konoha's power turns out to be far too powerful to be overthrown by force and, shortly before the Chunin Tournament, all of your brother's machinations crumble. The insurgency is destroyed before it has even really started and your lineage joins that of the Uchiha. A number of well-known kunoichi takes part in the strike against you, which reinforces your hatred for them.
-Your brother told you about the hereditary power of your clan without any of you understanding how to activate it. It is only now, leaning against a half-destroyed wall, bleeding and feeling your end near that the understanding of this technique is finally opening up to you. You then decide to go back very far in your own past in order to obtain your revenge.
-Your perfect knowledge of your "brother" allows you to kill him without leaving any clue to the Anbu. You then go to your ruined village shrine and exhumate the forbidden jutsu for yourself.
The reasons why you choose to go back to this time:
-Everyone in Konoha knows you as a secretive but somewhat friendly loser, not even remotely seen has a threat.
-One reason why your brother's plot failed was because he launched it at a time when Konoha was at the peak of its power. At this epoch you choose, the village is so disorganized by Orochimaru's machinations that the Okage must often rely on mere genin to carry important missions.
-The other big reason of your brother's failure was his direct approach based solely on strength, you will be more subtle and coerce Konoha's power players via their children.
-The thought of using the kunoichi who brought you down as slaves and making them the ones to carry the next generation of your clan makes you jubilate.
Your avatar is supposed to be a coldhearted child abuser and the future master of Konoha. Yet, he is so weak and pathetic that he needs to be given powers from nowhere to achieve something? He can't even figure out his own evil plan without grandpa holding him by the hand?
For me, this was just unacceptable. So, I have decided to write my own version of the story:
-You still begin your story as an orphan who has never achieved much in life.
-One day, a teenager who has the ascendancy over you, announces to you that he is your brother and that you must work with him to rebuild your clan.
-The years pass, your brother takes many lovers but ruins all your chances of doing the same, your frustration leads you to despise women.
-In Boruto's era, your brother suddenly disappears before reappearing a few days later. He tells you that he has traveled to the sanctuary of your ancient village and has unearthed the knowledge of a forbidden technique that allows him to control people. He intends to use it to raise an army and take control of the village.
-However, Konoha's power turns out to be far too powerful to be overthrown by force and, shortly before the Chunin Tournament, all of your brother's machinations crumble. The insurgency is destroyed before it has even really started and your lineage joins that of the Uchiha. A number of well-known kunoichi takes part in the strike against you, which reinforces your hatred for them.
-Your brother told you about the hereditary power of your clan without any of you understanding how to activate it. It is only now, leaning against a half-destroyed wall, bleeding and feeling your end near that the understanding of this technique is finally opening up to you. You then decide to go back very far in your own past in order to obtain your revenge.
-Your perfect knowledge of your "brother" allows you to kill him without leaving any clue to the Anbu. You then go to your ruined village shrine and exhumate the forbidden jutsu for yourself.
The reasons why you choose to go back to this time:
-Everyone in Konoha knows you as a secretive but somewhat friendly loser, not even remotely seen has a threat.
-One reason why your brother's plot failed was because he launched it at a time when Konoha was at the peak of its power. At this epoch you choose, the village is so disorganized by Orochimaru's machinations that the Okage must often rely on mere genin to carry important missions.
-The other big reason of your brother's failure was his direct approach based solely on strength, you will be more subtle and coerce Konoha's power players via their children.
-The thought of using the kunoichi who brought you down as slaves and making them the ones to carry the next generation of your clan makes you jubilate.
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