VN Ren'Py Just a Dream [v0.8 DLC] [Nmezme]

[Unmonikered]

So, some nice enough setup and a little character and introduction for some of the girls.

Not really much else to comment on, so I'll just leave my thoughts there:

-There were a lot of times when I had to click multiple times for the scene to change. If this isn't just me and machine then I suggest a code review.

-Tamao is fun and serves her purpose as exposition girl well, but her hair keeps clipping through her model. Her type of character, the meta-energetic-fun girl can also be a bit much at times so keep her in moderation.

-The sharp time skip and memory loss from the woman's suicide does well enough to introduce the disturbing elements and shows that the MC is not the only one effected by them. But I would advise not overusing that trick too often since it can become frustrating to have plot development seemingly offered and then sharply snatched away.

-There's a fair number of girls introduced and they're fine, but it may pay to spend a little time developing some of the ones already introduced. The current setup looks like it's going to add more next chapter, but the fleshing out of the main girls should come as soon as possible.

-If I recall correctly this is the second update without any NSFW. For a LIL-game the porn isn't necessarily the core focus, but for a porn game introducing itself then something to show what to expect in the future might be in order.

Looking forwards to seeing what the next update brings for our sad, brutalized progatonist.

 

[vilewe7570]

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[vaporeon12211]

had the devs said what tags to expect?

 

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[Noob Gamer 109]

at first looked like LiL(add it to the pile) but the more I look at it, the more it look similar to Two Sides Of The Same Coin. I will leave it to planned game for now, will try to interest russian vn public in this game, especially since I really like the models of characters here. Good luck to the author

 

[Jnx]

The main menu music better be the Nelly song with the same title
otherwise absolute trash

Also if it's just another LiL slop I can't be held responsible for the shit I'm gonna talk about it.

 

[nmezme]

Hello everyone, I'm the developer of Just a Dream!


I’m here to clarify a few things after reading some of the discussions around the game.

• First, I want to apologize for the inconsistency in the writing—especially the story and dialogues. I’m really, really bad at remembering things. Like… embarrassingly bad. When I realized the mall segment had some plot holes, I tried to patch it up and make it at least somewhat make sense?

Anyway, if you choose the option “Go look for Yuka and Saki”, there’s actually an explanation for where the MC gets a phone:

"{i}She lets out a soft giggle, the kind that feels like it means something... but probably doesn't."
"{i}Without another word, she pulls out her phone, taps the screen a few times, then casually hands it to me."
You "...Huh?"
You "...Why are you giving me your phone?"
Hina "Duh. You didn't bring your phone, right?"
Hina "Yuka said she might need to ask you something while she shops. So just keep it for now. She'll call if she needs you."

So... does this make a bit more sense now?

• Second, I know the beginning of the story feels like it's blatantly ripping off Lessons in Love—and yeah, that part was intentional. Hear me out. I may not be a genius writer, but I know a thing or two about marketing... and jokes (hopefully).

I thought “Hey, wouldn’t it be cool to make a plagiarism bait?”
But—if it ended up feeling like actual plagiarism I’mreallysorrypleaseforgiveme.


My real goal isn’t to rip anything off, but to make a story that captures a similar atmosphere, or vibe, that fans of Lessons in Love can also enjoy. I even stopped reading LiL story so my brain wouldn’t get too influenced by it (lol).


Now, let me explain what I meant by “marketing.”
My goal was to not attract the wrong audience. Like… not everyone wants to read a long, slow-burn story. Some people just want to jack off—and I don’t really want to cater to that type of audience.


So by starting the story in a familiar, bait-like way, I hoped to introduce a setting that felt recognizable to LiL readers... but eventually build something different.


That said, my idea wasn’t perfect. Nothing ever really is.


So yeah... that’s all I can share for now.
Thank you so much for your support, feedback, and critiques!
I can take criticism just fine—but please don’t bully me :,)

 

[Noob Gamer 109]

Okay I finished this VN so far. Kinda SO vibes more than LiL, engrish could use some work here and there, but it is not to the level where your eye start to twitch. Kinda disappointed at menu music, I was fully expecting "I was thinking about her, thinking about me, Open my eyes yeah, it was only just a dream" specifically its nightcore version, too bad that is not the case. Writing is a bit to similar to its inspiration material, you probably should do the Dissonance way, that is, fully commit to your own style and version rather than to try and imitate someone else(even tho Dissonance took after SO heavily, it still managed to go different direction). Art is good, writing is not bad(except the grammar in some cases), scenery is good enough for your first updates. It may seem like there is a lot of shade thrown at VN, but it could actually become very good as long as you go as far away from source material and as close as possible to your own version and direction. Best of luck

 

[nmezme]

-There were a lot of times when I had to click multiple times for the scene to change. If this isn't just me and machine then I suggest a code review.

That's on me. Between that and the hard pauses, I don't think people would like it if I used hard pauses too often.

scene sorabe83 with dissolve
Sora "I won't! Thank you, Sensei! I'll bring snacks!"
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Sora "Hey... thanks for saying yes. To helping us out, I mean."
You "I didn't really have a choice, did I?"

 

[nhnf85]

I know the beginning of the story feels like it's blatantly ripping off Lessons in Love

And with that, I lost interest in this game.

LiL is a terrible game. I played it years ago, and not only was it the first game I used the skip unseen text feature, I also stopped playing long before the Dev decided to do the early game changes.

 

[nmezme]

And with that, I lost interest in this game.

LiL is a terrible game. I played it years ago, and not only was it the first game I used the skip unseen text feature, I also stopped playing long before the Dev decided to do the early game changes.

It's totally okay if my game isn't to your taste—everyone has different preferences after all.
Just to clarify, the skip block feature has actually been removed but the change will take effect in the next update.
Still, I appreciate you taking the time to share your thoughts!

 

[ninjahotsprings]

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chapter 3 is not as long as the previous chapter but... yeah

 

[vaporeon12211]

nmezme sorry for the tag but i asked u something in itchio that u asked me to specify but after specifying u didnt answer so i dont know if the visa stuff make u dont see it or u ghosted me xd. Anyway would be nice if u can respond to that

 

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[nmezme]

nmezme sorry for the tag but i asked u something in itchio that u asked me to specify but after specifying u didnt answer so i dont know if the visa stuff make u dont see it or u ghosted me xd. Anyway would be nice if u can respond to that

My bad,

I forgot to reply

 

[dandanwa]

I NEED LOLI

 

[Unmonikered]

So not really much to say for this update.

-Textbox opacity is needed. Reading the text is downright difficult in a lot of scenes.

-It's interesting to see that the protagonist is already aware of and somewhat addressing the weird elements of the story.

Apart from that; Sora is fun and Leo's cute. Looking forwards to the next installment.

 

[vilewe7570]

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[vilewe7570]

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(The DLC works like an update; just extract it into the “game” file.)

 

[Unmonikered]

So, that was a bit fun character building, can't say I was expecting to see expansion on Kanna of the characters we've been presented, but the level of introspection and insight into a person like her shows promise for the future of the story.

It was more interesting though to see that Tamao seems to be more aware of the weirder aspects of the world than you expect, and that Protag-kun isn't the only one who can see those elements.

The DLC ending was a decent way to establish a good sense of bizzareness to the otherwise 'slice of life' instalment. Again though, be careful with how often you use that trick.

Looking forwards to seeing the next installment.