- Oct 1, 2019
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the "game" is kinda non existant.. and the english is just poor.. just one example from the last page
Hey Bro, Look Your Wife. haha
Hey Bro, Look at your wife. haha
also double repeat of You wake up to your cell phone vibrating. You wake up to your cell phone vibrating.
If you are not a native speaker please get someone to proofread it before release am sure there are people on here who would do it for free..
Also the version number is very misleading.. if it is just a test of concept..
start at like 0.01 then people would have known not to expect much.
v1.0 usually means the game is finished (except after release content or patches)
Anyway i hope you are not offended by comments i think (most) are just trying to be constructive...
oh and one last thing if you are planning a flat visual novel and not a sandbox ect game you may wanna look into renpy or something like that its easy(ish) to learn and is better in general for flat visual novels.. if sandbox then html may be a better option (renpy can but would require more learning of it).
Hey Bro, Look Your Wife. haha
Hey Bro, Look at your wife. haha
also double repeat of You wake up to your cell phone vibrating. You wake up to your cell phone vibrating.
If you are not a native speaker please get someone to proofread it before release am sure there are people on here who would do it for free..
Also the version number is very misleading.. if it is just a test of concept..
start at like 0.01 then people would have known not to expect much.
v1.0 usually means the game is finished (except after release content or patches)
Anyway i hope you are not offended by comments i think (most) are just trying to be constructive...
oh and one last thing if you are planning a flat visual novel and not a sandbox ect game you may wanna look into renpy or something like that its easy(ish) to learn and is better in general for flat visual novels.. if sandbox then html may be a better option (renpy can but would require more learning of it).
- Jun 5, 2017
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Hey dev, your pt-br is showing. 
I know its early development BUT:
- try to edit spaces between the chars names and their dialogues,
- try to edit spaces between possessive adjectives/pronouns and the subject: i.e. "your wife" instead of "yourwife",
- have some time to proof read or maybe ask for someone to check it then submit, take your time.
I wish you all the best
I know its early development BUT:
- try to edit spaces between the chars names and their dialogues,
- try to edit spaces between possessive adjectives/pronouns and the subject: i.e. "your wife" instead of "yourwife",
- have some time to proof read or maybe ask for someone to check it then submit, take your time.
I wish you all the best
- Jan 16, 2022
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- 142
well.......
1.) thats not a game
2.) Jumping images.. the UI is a mess
3.) the writting is beyond readable..
if i would rate it its not even 1 star at the moment
There is a lot work to do if you want to get this in line but hey if you get this done we have a nice BNWO game.....
1.) thats not a game
2.) Jumping images.. the UI is a mess
3.) the writting is beyond readable..
if i would rate it its not even 1 star at the moment
There is a lot work to do if you want to get this in line but hey if you get this done we have a nice BNWO game.....
As noted above, this is not a game and if it were it would be unplayable as the writing and UI are shit.
I wanted to give it a try but i saw the dev rating himself 5 stars begging for others to do so also and the other 5 star rating is a bunch of random letters being smashed on a keyboard.. skip i guess