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6 hours ago
Here with a Friday update. Holidays are over, and I'm back with the daily grind.
I'll have more updates soon when I make more progress.
till next update!
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This dev could really do with some writing courses..
Such a great mom model wasted on this kind of story
Such a great mom model wasted on this kind of story
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Why don't you show us how's it done chief? Drop the link to your masterpiece. Let's see what you can do.
No need to be hostile. There's plenty of MS games on this forum with great stories.
And just because I haven't made a better game doesn't make this one beyond criticism. The tone of my comment wasn't the best, but I would still suggest the dev to try to take the help of resources to make the story more sensible. Because right now, it's quite flawed and illogical, and there is no proper characterisation even though there are only 2 characters.
I can come up with 2 points immediately:
- The MC goes from feeling guilty one moment for overstepping boundaries, and then right in the next moment oversteps more boundaries. What is the point of showing that guilt? Why not go full creep mode, that would make much more sense given his behaviour.
- Vicky as a character makes sense somewhat. Still, she keeps saying "it's wrong" again and again, and then let's the MC have his way anyway. It's like she has no mental strength at all, or any control over her body because she says something and does something else constantly.
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For the record, I was being sarcastic not hostile. (busting your chops).
This is fictional porn game so you can't really expect it to be in line with reality. We all know that in real life none of this would happen, but who is here to deal with real life? For the most part, people are playing this game to indulge in the forbidden/taboo. I think you're judging too harshly. See if for what is and just try to enjoy it.
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Not to spam up this great game's thread but...
Your opinion is your singular POV and this is a thread for comments. But I would say in response this character is a teenager dude horny for his mom. He's not some smooth adult. He's all over the place because he loves his mom and at the same time wants to exploit/perv out on her. As far as the character and the writing it makes perfect sense.
All the good ones have a reluctant mother who slowly becomes corrupted.
Once again, good writing by the Dev IMO.
This is a condescending insult. Saying the Dev is a bad writer and needs schooling.
Your opinion is your singular POV and this is a thread for comments. But I would say in response this character is a teenager dude horny for his mom. He's not some smooth adult. He's all over the place because he loves his mom and at the same time wants to exploit/perv out on her. As far as the character and the writing it makes perfect sense.
Have you ever played these type of incest games?
All the good ones have a reluctant mother who slowly becomes corrupted.
Once again, good writing by the Dev IMO.
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if you're going to have a character move their lips, the best thing to do is add a voice to it. Otherwise, don't move their lips and just add the words.
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This just tells me you haven't played the good games at all. At this risk of sounding condescending, if you think this is good, you have ridiculously low standards. I'm not here to berate the dev, because games take effort to make. My comment was just suggesting how he can improve it to make the story more consistent.
You can believe what you want, my opinion is as valid as yours. I can dislike the story, and it can be bad, both can be true. You say he's not some smooth adult, why does he keep feeling guilty then? He's a horny teenager right? And what about the mom? Is she a sex doll? Why doesn't she physically stop the MC, like ever? Is he that much stronger than her that he can do whatever he wants to her? Does he have telekenetic control over her? Did she get immediately and fully corrupted by her son's lust?
Conflict is what this story lacks. Corruption takes time, and conflict. The mother won't immediately go along with whatever the MC tries, we need to know what she thinks as well once he tries anything. She would refuse stuff outright in the beginning. What happens here is just 1-2 dialogues of back and forth and then Vicky goes along with anything and everything.
I realize this is not a recommendation thread, but I will suggest 2 games to you that have actual corruption and buildup: No More Money and Monkey Business.
I said what I had to say, but I realize there are a lot of people here to defend the dev from any criticisms. So I won't go any further with this discussion. Thank you to the dev for his efforts.
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52 minutes ago
I'm about to render the last scene for this chapter, exciting stuff—reminder to myself to never add rain to my scenes, as it absolutely cooks my GPU memory.
till next update.