SizeQueenShrine
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- Sep 25, 2020
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Oh, man! What is this? Mahabharata of interracial cucking? I guess that's it: long and epic. After completing it, I'm satisfied with this long journey. But... but not entirely.
It's decently written and usually well paced, characters have their quirks, which is nicely done and sex scenes are fine too, but I guess it has been a bit overdone with all that slayin' of Aiko's henhouse. It started to get more and more tedious from there. It turns out, bulls like Darren have not much of personal life, since they're commited to fucking the whole town of horny female population. I bet MC's bully did needed to sleep with his cock put in ice bowl to regenerate from all that strain, that poor guy.
Making him much too overpowered destroyed part of fiction believablity. For such a long story, it would have been better option, if we had a larger number of possible danger tangents, characters with their own agency. In latter parts of "Locked Down" we indeed get more of black fellows, Darren's friends, mostly background fillers for orgy scenes, but missed opportunity here was to create them more free roaming and possibly more competitve with each other in their race for white pussy.
Darren doing all the bull's work killed much of variety and made it too obvious. You could say, I should be happy with interracial fucking themed story and yeah, it was fine, but if your characters are mostly teenagers with school background, search for sex adentures should be more expansive with more dicking prospects than one Darren. Even if we are constricted with pandemic restrictions.
Idea that closing society down and leaving people's interactions mostly virtual and web-based, without much personal contact, derailed normalcy and could have sparked with fetishistic interracial sex fad among horny teens exchanging BBC stuff on social media, so that changed dating market was on the table in this story and kinda there but put not convincingly enough.
Is the other side of tracks depopulated in this setting or what?
It's decently written and usually well paced, characters have their quirks, which is nicely done and sex scenes are fine too, but I guess it has been a bit overdone with all that slayin' of Aiko's henhouse. It started to get more and more tedious from there. It turns out, bulls like Darren have not much of personal life, since they're commited to fucking the whole town of horny female population. I bet MC's bully did needed to sleep with his cock put in ice bowl to regenerate from all that strain, that poor guy.
Making him much too overpowered destroyed part of fiction believablity. For such a long story, it would have been better option, if we had a larger number of possible danger tangents, characters with their own agency. In latter parts of "Locked Down" we indeed get more of black fellows, Darren's friends, mostly background fillers for orgy scenes, but missed opportunity here was to create them more free roaming and possibly more competitve with each other in their race for white pussy.
Darren doing all the bull's work killed much of variety and made it too obvious. You could say, I should be happy with interracial fucking themed story and yeah, it was fine, but if your characters are mostly teenagers with school background, search for sex adentures should be more expansive with more dicking prospects than one Darren. Even if we are constricted with pandemic restrictions.
Idea that closing society down and leaving people's interactions mostly virtual and web-based, without much personal contact, derailed normalcy and could have sparked with fetishistic interracial sex fad among horny teens exchanging BBC stuff on social media, so that changed dating market was on the table in this story and kinda there but put not convincingly enough.
Is the other side of tracks depopulated in this setting or what?