VN Ren'Py Logan Netori Story [Ch.2 P1] [QuantumBunnyStudio]

[Ka1tzer]

A quick suggestion for the dev: I believe you should rename the game. Reason for it is that the title sounds A LOT like a ntr game title, and this one isn't one - it's netori (although the 3 letters fit the same). I only found the game by chance due to it passing through the filters I have in place when looking at the "latest games & updates" page.

Perhaps something like "The Wife Lover" or "The Wife Stealer"? That "Your" in the current title, "Your Wife's Lover" leaves the idea that the protagonist is the one getting cucked instead of being the one who does the cucking ambiguous (it's better than using ""my" wife's lover" which would make it clear the protagonist would be the cuck though).

The "your" is supposed to be addressed to who? The protagonist? No, because the protagonist is the lover. The player? Then it gives the idea that they'd be playing as the cuck (after all, the wife would be "his", since it's ""your" wife's lover".

 

[Ghost Rida]

Fairly sure that should be "Loser" unless making bad choices results in MC getting his orifice stretched, somehow.

Came here to say this. Was disappointed that it took 3 pages for someone else to notice.

 

[Darnol]

some scenes have a narration, but the image don't change. is this intendeed?
In this scene, there is a request, but nothing happens.

 

[Wolfen5]

" Seducer for confident, winning moves, and Looser for setbacks and lost ground. "
Did you mean Loser there? Looser could mean he takes big things in the back door.

 

[xXwankerXx]

Renders look a lil too much like the whole game's a korean manhwa or heavily influenced by one/some, but as long as the MC gets to cuck or get cucked depending on the player's choices, I'm ok with it. Women look great too.

Now, let's see how much story there is and how good it is.

The whole game will be about Logan. Every new addition is a new girl Logan's hitting on.

You might wanna consider changing the title to something sounding more netori-ish so fans of this kink don't get the wrong idea about the premise and check it out to see what's up.

There's a whole lotta cuck MC games with titles sounding relatively similar to this game's. Just a heads-up.

Best of luck with the project !!

 

[Inimigo]

Não confio nenhum pouco num dev que fez um jogo ntr e vem com esse ago. Principalmente com essa aparência de cuck do mc

 

[grayhounds]

Big fan of netori games, wish there were more. Looking forward to trying it out.

 

[Pagoramix]

honestly bloated dialogue. I mean, it goes on and on barely makin sense until it abruptly ends. I don't even know if the MC is supposed to be taken seriously, if he actualy believe that he's an alpha man or whatnot. Everything he says and do cry how much he's compensating for his inferiority complex to the point i don't even know if it's something the author tell poorly or if it's simply that bad written. I don't see what's interesting about him, he's not likable, which is the point i get it, though even anti hero story rely on us feel for them. So, the guy had a shitty college experience, mooved on being an "alpha" to get back on the people that did him nasty, and got rich in the process. The story start after that. Where is it going from now on, this isn't told. What should we be expecting pray tell.

Wanna know what got me through? Thought the guy matched the look and it was about a macho guy discovering he's gay. Well, i know this dev other work which showcase the same character and this seems impossible but still lowkey gay vibes.

 

[ffive]

I don't even know if the MC is supposed to be taken seriously, if he actualy believe that he's an alpha man or whatnot. Everything he says and do cry how much he's compensating for his inferiority complex to the point i don't even know if it's something the author tell poorly or if it's simply that bad written.

The whole "alpha male" mentality is nothing but compensation in the first place, so MC coming across like that absolutely shouldn't be any surprise.

 

[Jungles70]

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[Pagoramix]

The whole "alpha male" mentality is nothing but compensation in the first place, so MC coming across like that absolutely shouldn't be any surprise.

But is it? I don't think this story tell us how wrong his way is. It's netori right? Why don't i want him to netori away? see my point?

 

[ffive]

But is it? I don't think this story tell us how wrong his way is. It's netori right? Why don't i want to netori away with that dumbass? see my point?

No, i don't see your point. Why should your personal opinion whether you want to get fucked by MC matter anything here? He is fucking people who are into him, your taste in guys not aligning with theirs really doesn't matter.

You complain that the guy can't be taken seriously as "alpha male" and my counter-point is that every guy who seriously buys into the whole "alpha male" nonsense is just as pathetic and worthy of nothing but derision. Because it's all compensation; not just with this particular guy but all of them. But it doesn't mean they're going to be universally perceived as such, some people do buy into it and get off on it.

 

[Pagoramix]

Yeah indeed might have been a bit misunderstood. Don't wanna fuck the guy, my point is, it's netori, i don't think that critic is intended.

 

[I-Love-Adventure]

nice game thank you

 

[idfc_]

thx

 

[swiver]

Looser

loser*

 

[Yricyn]

This is some good stuff...and hopefully you ain't gonna become SnowBunnyStudio

 

[Kyle Randall]

Anti NTR tools: A knife and a shovel. Problem solved

 

[Adhdclassic]

the hair that's all I am going to say.

 

[Kybo]

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