Some Devs REALLY should hire a proofreader for their material and grammar. Just sayin'. Makes stories "sound" right when they're read.
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they need to be profitable to be able to "hire" people, most AVN devs make peanuts and can't afford it. Some do have friends/fans who do it for free but they aren't professionals either most of the time.
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He probably meant he was volunteering. I'll be interested to see how that works out for him...
I think it is fine for the fans to help and point out stuff like that, specially since I am not paying an just leaching of his work here. So that can be some way to contribute, I just don't know where to post it. For patreon you need to pay him to comment and didn't see any discord link here.
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He'll see it here. The first several chapters will be reworked when the first book is done. Most of the typos like this (in early chapters) have already been reported.
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you can pm him here, he is still somewhat active on the site even if not in the thread itself
- Dec 17, 2021
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There are three or four more scenes for the full release of part 4. The full release is expected... any day now... ish
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Yeah i guess the full part 4 will be a mid oct release if not end of oct. i would guess that dima will put the bachlorette party in part 4.. otherwise idk what the hell the old man is doing with the time jk love you Dima
jk love you Dima
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They ain't got man of them there cement ponds in Oklahoma! Most of the time they cool off in stock watering tanks, the same one they bathe in every Saturday night, and if they eat beans for dinner they make it a bubble bath!counting the money while relaxing besides pool.
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doubt bankperson will accept sweaty money.Skip the middle-man and just bathe directly in your money. Such is my advice.
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I noticed an obvious inconsistency in the last update that I hope wasn't reported yet. When Kira shows up at Ryker's penthouse with Dillon and Isabella she's sporting a long hairstyle that's impossible to hide under her cop cap, yet it couldn't be seen at the hospital, where apparently she had some sort of short hairstyle. When asked about it the dialogue makes it clear that *some time* has passed since she left the police, but when the update starts the introducing narration states "The following day...".
Someone is being inconsistent
Someone is being inconsistent
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It was under her cop hat. It was referenced when they showed up at Ryker's.
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I noticed an obvious inconsistency in the last update that I hope wasn't reported yet. When Kira shows up at Ryker's penthouse with Dillon and Isabella she's sporting a long hairstyle that's impossible to hide under her cop cap, yet it couldn't be seen at the hospital, where apparently she had some sort of short hairstyle. When asked about it the dialogue makes it clear that *some time* has passed since she left the police, but when the update starts the introducing narration states "The following day...".
Someone is being inconsistent
You can see her braids under the cop hat. If you could hide such a long braids under there is a different thing
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When asked if she had those braids under the hat she literally says "Yes, I've been growing my hair out ever since I was discharged". The "Yes" part should be removed because it's impossible that those long braids fit under the cap, AND the introduction should be amended too to say "Some time later..." to be consistent.
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Girls gotta have their secrets dude. Just let it go.
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