This is just a mess, which is unfortunate since the renders are good and mostly unique.
Since @Morpheuspro review, it's gotten even worse. The story is so disjointed it makes no sense. The mc goes from innocent retard (or whatever is the pc equivalent) to dom over some rando girl that shows up, while of course still being a retard leaving his family at the hospital for hours on end during an emergency. I don't think I've ever rated anything below a 3 but not sure how this could get anything more than 2 stars.
To improve, there would need to be quite a bit of expansion on what's going on so scenes aren't so disconnected and make the mc at least someone partly realistic, consistent and not to appear so idiotic or less mature than a 4 year old. This last chapter/girl would need to be introduced later so that some of the above could happen/develop before we get to her so it makes any sense.
I hope this can be addressed since the dynamic in the household is actually something I'd look forward to.
Since @Morpheuspro review, it's gotten even worse. The story is so disjointed it makes no sense. The mc goes from innocent retard (or whatever is the pc equivalent) to dom over some rando girl that shows up, while of course still being a retard leaving his family at the hospital for hours on end during an emergency. I don't think I've ever rated anything below a 3 but not sure how this could get anything more than 2 stars.
To improve, there would need to be quite a bit of expansion on what's going on so scenes aren't so disconnected and make the mc at least someone partly realistic, consistent and not to appear so idiotic or less mature than a 4 year old. This last chapter/girl would need to be introduced later so that some of the above could happen/develop before we get to her so it makes any sense.
I hope this can be addressed since the dynamic in the household is actually something I'd look forward to.