- Nov 18, 2017
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Oh god yes!, PLEASE!.
Unless they are a known dev with a proven track record there should be a V0.01/demo/ section.
Unless they are a known dev with a proven track record there should be a V0.01/demo/ section.
girls look good but really can't say a lot about anything else it was just so short sadly.
- May 11, 2017
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It's unfair to review the game at this point. It's far too early in development to do that. Hardly anything to review.
Anyhow here is my opinion on things so far when it comes to the starring role. The male protagonist is unlikable and does not seem to have any redeeming qualities. I get the impression that he is insufferable, arrogant, uncouth, perverted idiot and comes off as a bit of an asshole for lack of a better word. The first image of him is not very flattering. He looks like he just got out of prison for raping his grandma. I mean the guy spells "Fantasies" as "Phantasies"... Very punchable face... just saying.
I'm not saying you should never have a douche bag protagonist. It takes exceptional writing skills to pull that off. It's your game, make it how you want to. If you do go down that douche bag protagonist road I hope you remember to give him some redeeming qualities, and a good explanation as to why he is the way he is.
As for the writing itself... Good writing is important. These games are not text messages you are sending over to some bitch you are trying to get with. Remember to capitalize the first word, and put in proper punctuation... Words like "Phantasies" can make some people want to punch the screen.
Anyhow here is my opinion on things so far when it comes to the starring role. The male protagonist is unlikable and does not seem to have any redeeming qualities. I get the impression that he is insufferable, arrogant, uncouth, perverted idiot and comes off as a bit of an asshole for lack of a better word. The first image of him is not very flattering. He looks like he just got out of prison for raping his grandma. I mean the guy spells "Fantasies" as "Phantasies"... Very punchable face... just saying.
I'm not saying you should never have a douche bag protagonist. It takes exceptional writing skills to pull that off. It's your game, make it how you want to. If you do go down that douche bag protagonist road I hope you remember to give him some redeeming qualities, and a good explanation as to why he is the way he is.
As for the writing itself... Good writing is important. These games are not text messages you are sending over to some bitch you are trying to get with. Remember to capitalize the first word, and put in proper punctuation... Words like "Phantasies" can make some people want to punch the screen.
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- Sep 30, 2018
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- Jan 26, 2018
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* Not a fan of how the MC looks.
* What level of school and why? It's not that hard to come up with a decent story.
* MC is kind of a jerk, isn't he?
* Seriously, some background on why Steve is here would be most useful. It would definitely create a better sense of immersion.
* That's it? That's the game?
Well, I don't have much to say about this one. I wouldn't put mymoney behind it for several more updates if the most the dev can offer is essentially a quick demo of pretty much nothing without any sort of interesting story. The MC isn't likable, there's no sense of immersion, this is just not very good.
* What level of school and why? It's not that hard to come up with a decent story.
* MC is kind of a jerk, isn't he?
* Seriously, some background on why Steve is here would be most useful. It would definitely create a better sense of immersion.
* That's it? That's the game?
Well, I don't have much to say about this one. I wouldn't put mymoney behind it for several more updates if the most the dev can offer is essentially a quick demo of pretty much nothing without any sort of interesting story. The MC isn't likable, there's no sense of immersion, this is just not very good.
- Aug 29, 2018
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Yeah.... hum... too much work is needed on this one.... I will not say the same things as the older posts but I think the same... and for now, even if it's a "Rendering test" ..... way.... way.... way too short to give you good advice so for now : CRAP!!! but have potential.... see you in maybe.... hum... 1 year or more?!...
- Sep 22, 2017
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MC looks like the type of guy courts order to stay away from schools.
And wow, that was incredibly short.
(What she said.)
And wow, that was incredibly short.
(What she said.)
