The art here is excellent, and you seem to have your own style rather than aping other successful artists in the genre (Looking at you, Akabur clones). The writing, what I've seen of it, isn't bad either. But good grief the crashes are incessant. If it's feasible I'd suggest finding someone with more Ren'py/coding chops to help out, but at the bare minimum you should remove the "Save in your bedroom only" stipulation and let players use the default Ren'py save function. I gave up on the game after about 20 minutes' time because it's too annoying to repeatedly hit a crash and have to redo the day(s) since my last save.