Maybe get a native English speaker to translate it better and it has potential. I can't quit laughing and the usage of certain words. I.E.: In the clothing store the guy tells her to "pick your laundry and try it on and I will pay for everything."
"Laundry" is dirty clothes that are waiting to be washed. It may not seem like that big of a deal to some, but if the majority of the dialogue is like this, it's too cringy for me to play. I may check back in the future to see if anything improved in later versions, but for now it's a pass.
EDIT: Nevermind. I just realized the date on this. Oh well