This is pretty good so far. Though not without problems.
The voicing of the characters is quite good. I actually kept them on for this game, which I almost never do. Some lines in the early parts of the game get very quiet near the end though, especially for Azazel. Even a couple of her later ones seem to just stop short, turning 'teach' into 'tea', for example.
Some of the CG's are comically wrong in detail. I'm not talking about weird hands or anything like that. What I mean is MC cooking pasta and chicken for Josa and the CG showing her eating a sandwich. Another example is MC and Azazel running around the block and the CG showing a racetrack in the background.
The narration is mostly in present tense, but sometimes switches to past tense for no discernible reason.
After the choice during Phanta's first tutoring session, the MC's answer is not labeled as spoken by the MC (whichever answer you picked). The same thing happens later during the phonecall with Phanta.
At the end of Josa's second session, it seems like you walk her to the door, then after that you both agree to end the session. That's just weird.
Maybe I'm not hearing it right, but Josa's line, "C'mon, one more song!" is voiced as "C'mon, one per song!" (or something similar).
Finally, here's my rather thorough list of errors in the script. A large amount of these are missing punctuation, many of which are vocative commas. I actually went through everything this time, but no guarantees that I found everything.
Anyway, I'm looking forward to seeing the rest.