blkcrow20
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Same for me, I know they are goons but I think it was too aggressive.imo, The scene of the goon holding her felt a little weird for me too it changed the mood. pros: the new character added drama, which is needed. I expect variety of characters, not only those who MC&GF felt comfortable having fun, the MC need an antagonist or a couple (BCG take notes).
About de GF going from 0 to 100, I would like to see some hesitation by MC or GF depending on the situation from time to time, even when they love each other, sometimes they will disagree or overthink things.
As for the pace, I agree. In the space of what? Two days I believe, MC goes from wanting her to tease with a wet t-shirt to wanting her to french kiss Trevor, sit on the face of Skeeter when he knows she's going commando, to send nude pics to Trevor, etc. I think, like you said, having one of them hesitate or think it through more, would work better. Spread it out more to even out the pace.