- Dec 7, 2021
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I absolutely LOVED the two scenes happening at the same time. Anon being overwhelmed with lust from watching his girl suck Drago off, while his childhood friend was allowing him to finger her in the ass as he watches her. I kept wondering who or if one of them would go too far, and trying to guess who that would be. I'd say the only bummer for me during that scene was Cee telling anon from the start that she wanted to wait, so that sorta took the wind outta my sails as things built up.The 5th chapter is packed but I don't see it as a bad thing.
As for the cell phone, I can say that prolly it was not a good idea to have two sex scenes playing out concurrently - one IRL and one on the phone. Having to constantly switch between them you lose focus and can't fully immerse into any of them. I later played the same scene with only Anon getting action and it felt better that way - I could fully concentrate on Cee, picturing the scene in my imagination, it felt more real, immersive.
I think it'd be better if the sharing scenes of the two couples followed one another instead of being simultanious - but I wouldn't call it a serious flaw. Just a point for improvement.