well.. i played both path and must say it is very very promising! i liked it very much so far!
i wont give an evaluation yet because its tooo short atm.
what should be done: there are many typos which disturb the immersion; in the dominant part Mark let the things run because he knows the MC will get where he want him to while the MC doesnt yet know what will happen to him.. he wants a strong woman, maybe sometimes he should get doubts that he has done the right thing but its to late... so the invitation of Marks friend is good but i dont think the MC should know and also delightful embrace a dominatrix.... the friend should be a motherly loving woman who always wanted a son and the trade of for the MC is, that she cooks helps in the household etc.( if not mother a Maid would be the thing!!!) at first...... well we all know where this leads ^^ powershift and domination.. of course the GF knows her background and that leads to even more funny thoughts and scenes with her point of view when tings happens to the unaware MC!! and last thing ^^ i would recomend: build in one more step in dom route before cumeating. The first part should be the pleasuring of the GF.. First the pleasure each other then she beginns to blueball him and thats the moment she will jerk him off if he eats his cum... and then going on like it is in story so far ^^
just some thoughts of mine (yeah i like the dom part ^^)
for the china trip its to little to say something