I really liked this VN but this new chapter has some major missteps.
It's a real bummer that the money moment, Vi finally cheating on the MC, was overshadowed by 4 other things happening at once that diluted the power of the moment. At the same time, you were
- Having sex with an unlikeable character for the first time, when you didn't really want to
- Trying to pick up the pieces from almost shagging your sister
- Trying to process several new male characters, including one introduced during photoshoot
- Squinting and trying to understand why Vi has blonde hair
It's not that the individual storyline pacing is too fast, it's that it's too much happening at once. Too much progression simultaneously.
The blonde wig thing was also a horrible decision, because in 2D drawn art the characters don't look too different from each other, and are mostly identified by their hair styles and clothing. So it didn't really register in your brain as Vi, but as some other character, which limited the emotional impact.
It would have been much hotter if we DIDN'T find out what happened at the photoshoot, and then a few scenes later you find a picture on Vi's phone of her giving a blowjob to Bruce (and not some random new character that was introduced), and it's a violation of trust and an escalation of the relationship. That would have been hot.
And the blonde wig + porn shoot participation should have happened later. It should have escalated with cheating, then gone to pornography, then gone to full bimbofication with blonde hair/new sense of style. Instead, it all happened at the same time.
Also there was too much Deus Ex Machina interrupting scenes. I think the moment with the sister would have been better with a simple "Um, let's pretend that didn't happen" to keep the tension simmering underneath.
It's a real bummer that the money moment, Vi finally cheating on the MC, was overshadowed by 4 other things happening at once that diluted the power of the moment. At the same time, you were
- Having sex with an unlikeable character for the first time, when you didn't really want to
- Trying to pick up the pieces from almost shagging your sister
- Trying to process several new male characters, including one introduced during photoshoot
- Squinting and trying to understand why Vi has blonde hair
It's not that the individual storyline pacing is too fast, it's that it's too much happening at once. Too much progression simultaneously.
The blonde wig thing was also a horrible decision, because in 2D drawn art the characters don't look too different from each other, and are mostly identified by their hair styles and clothing. So it didn't really register in your brain as Vi, but as some other character, which limited the emotional impact.
It would have been much hotter if we DIDN'T find out what happened at the photoshoot, and then a few scenes later you find a picture on Vi's phone of her giving a blowjob to Bruce (and not some random new character that was introduced), and it's a violation of trust and an escalation of the relationship. That would have been hot.
And the blonde wig + porn shoot participation should have happened later. It should have escalated with cheating, then gone to pornography, then gone to full bimbofication with blonde hair/new sense of style. Instead, it all happened at the same time.
Also there was too much Deus Ex Machina interrupting scenes. I think the moment with the sister would have been better with a simple "Um, let's pretend that didn't happen" to keep the tension simmering underneath.
