Just played this game.
story is interesting. and honestly, it carries the game enough to continue playing it even though the English is really horrendous. my eyes bleed every single line.
the dev needs the help of a native speaker, or at least an AI, to correct the whole game. right now, even google translate isn't that bad.
the dialogs and inner dialogs are also very basic, probably because the dev struggles with English quite a bit. maybe he should write in his own language, for deeper and more complex lines, and translate with AI or professionals. maybe it helps to artificially increase the number of lines, but the MC comments on every action before and after, when just a scene skip would work just fine.
for example : "ok I need a shower." "i'll go take a shower now." "ok, i'm done with my shower".
either the dev is very obsessed with personal hygiene for the MC, or it's 3 wasted line and 2 renders. just skip to the next scene.
Mila is not a bad character at all, but the player needs more context and story about her to make a better and more informed decision when betraying or staying loyal to Victor. She is a major factor in that decision and would add more conflict in that choice. but right now, there is not even a single thought when making that choice, it's basically 10 LIs vs 1 that forces you and orders you around...
Rin's story is also missing, it seems. we don't know anything about her past. maybe she is just a simple girl with a very normal life except for the fact that she became friends with Zeke. she falls for MC as if he is the only man remaining on Earth for her. she asks for MC to open up to her, but she doesn't share anything about her apart from taking care of him everyday. after MC shares everything about him to everyone, it was the right time for her to go to him privately and tell her story somehow.
Alice too, right now she is just the classic shy girl with a long time crush, that grows into a cat lady, there is nothing else to her. MC suggesting that Krystal and her meet and work together was a very long time coming.
when Maya asks MC if he has a girlfriend, it would have been funny if he told her that he has 10 girls fighting for his attention
it would be out of character for him as he is very private and reserved, but he also tries to be more honest and open with her about his life. and saying it with a deadpan expression would add to the comedy. at least, we could expect a mother's intuition to kick in when she meets the girls around MC, so she would suspect they all have feelings for her son, and could ask him about that. xD