Hey
name88 - King of Hearts !
This is a fine start. I personally don't mind the lack of choice here. After all you need to plant the seeds and I hope there will be more choices in future episodes. It looks that you wanted to tell a lot of things about the context, and I see you put a lot of yourself, as in your personal views on the current world, in the game.
Not being a big fan of POV, I won't comment on the general use of it. It's your choice. However I agree with previous comments on the kissing part. There actually can't be POV kissing since the character could only see hair and ears.
Now for the technical part. The eyes look too much like glass balls, and the ring of light that you put on the camera makes the reflection look weird. There are a few lighting inconsistencies during some scenes. The overlay's size for the special camera view shouldn't change, and you really should change the cum and teeth texture.
As the characters are concerned, as usual in VNs they are a bit exaggerated. I regret that the MC has no problem whatsoever in being a whore, and at the same time religious aspects seem strong in this story. I believe this needs more of context/backstory.
Now, that said, this first version gives a good impression. I wish you the best for this adventure.