Okay, after three weeks I finally completed my English re-write of this game. It was a massive undertaking , considering how far into development the game is, but I felt the game deserved some TLC. Elsa94 created a very cool game, with a good story, and a number of appealing characters.
Ver 0.19
Google Drive
What I did:
1- Corrected the English translation. It was the only thing, IMO, that was really dragging down the game.
2- Fixed name mismatches. There were many instances where the dialogue on screen did not match the correct person.
3- Enhanced the dialogue during the heart warming scenes.
4- Added more humorous lines to the crazy characters. Especially Allana and Glory. Also the study group and test scenes.
5- Stayed true to the original story and the characters. I have been in conversation with Elsa, and this was a concern of hers/his(?). If anyone feels I strayed too far, please let me know.
6- Removed a lot of redundant lines and replaced them with more relevant dialogue. I felt the reader didn't need to be constantly reminded that it was a government sponsored program.
What I didn't do:
1- Fix some coding issues.
2- Deviate from the story. I believe it is true to Elsa94's vision.
3- Fix every single line. I would say that I covered about 95% of the story. There was an awful lot, and I may have missed some dialogue here and there.
I do not know if old saves can be migrated into this version. I would suggest starting from the beginning anyway, to receive the full impact of these changes.
I hope you like it.
