VN - Ren'Py - Origin Story [v0.7.0] [JDOR]

• The renders are fantastic
• The characters are unique and interesting
• The girls are really hot and each have their own unique charms and flaws
• The sex scenes are hot
• The superpowers are varied and range from useless to overpowered. They also sometimes come with negative side effects and we get to see how the characters cope with that.
• The story is engaging with well written dialogue, witty humor and intriguing foreshadowing

I think previous reviews have been pretty unfair about a couple points and I would like to give another perspective on it...

First is the MC. Some have criticized the MC as being "weak" but I disagree. The MC type in this VN is dynamic. He starts out as a horny teenager simp that probably masturbates more than a healthy amount, but he is growing and developing as a character as each chapter progresses. He also remains in good spirits and takes his adversities and shortcomings in stride so I think that's admirable. He also has a good set of friends around him, each with their own charm.

The second thing I've seen people complain about is that many of the girls, particularly Parker, have active sex lives prior to romancing the MC. IMO, this is perfectly fine. It's the 21st century and it's perfectly reasonable for grown ass single women to be sexually active. So I don't think this VN should get negative marks for that since it's more realistic.

It's important to note that at this stage of the story as of writing this (Ch. 3) only one girl is truly romancing the MC. Two others could be considered fuck buddies, one close friend might have a crush on him but it's difficult to see, and the rest of the girls aren't romantically involved with the MC yet. There is a chance that some may not even become LIs. The relationships are still developing so just bear that in mind.

Also to clear something up for those who are concerned... there is no NTR in Origin Story. There is no Netorare, no cuckoldry or any other variant of NTR of any kind. The Dev for this game is very aware of those tropes and has steered clear of them. There is a Cuckquean though.

The third thing I've seen complaints about is the lack of Animations. The Dev has opted to not use animations until he feels he is good enough with them to make high quality animations. I totally support this decision since it can be a total boner killer when an otherwise good VN has shitty stock sex animations just for the sake of having animations. The renders in this VN are fantastic and the sex scenes are hot even without the animations.

In summary, Origin Story is a fantastic up-and-coming VN. I look forward to seeing more if it and I would highly recommend it to anyone.

V0.3.1
Good story, i'm sorry i suck in english, but i really want to give a rate at this AVN. So, this is my opinion about :
- The MC : Not the best, but still decent.
- The girls : Evelyn and Ruth are my favorites. The story with Ember is good, and i really hope she'll be in control of her power. They all have a proper personality and that's a good point.
- The story : Good, i really want to know what will happen.
- Renders and other tech is not my domain, but for me, i really like it. If you can make some animations, that's will be better.
-Sounds : Ok

I play vn's mostly for the story and the characters the sex part of these is always secondary. As it is now in 0.3.1 the story even though we have not got far is not bad and has potential. The big problem though is I find it hard to care about all of the important people/Li's that are close to MC.

Without spoiling the mother figure I find the worst and it was annoying listening to the mc worship her when as a player what she did on mc's birthday was enough to put me off for good. The sister we don't know much about but her job is the kind that's pretty public and one I would also probably avoid if and when given the chance.

Your "childhood friend" has a power which is also a big no-no for me, she seems sweet and I would like to oblige her with mc's virginity but the fact she can and does all but sleep with half the town by choice using her power throws a big spanner in the works. I am supposed to feel guilty after not letting her be mc's first as she gets upset about it. I do not though because as she tells me herself she never got to have that first experience with mc as she already experienced sex many times with her power. Infact she states she specifically choose "vessels" that had a lot of sex and spent 2 month's experiencing sex to prepare herself for the mc's first time?? This actually made me laugh at the hypocracy I felt no guilt at all after her talk it only made my choice feel better. I wanted to like Evelyn but I would rather not deal with that kettle of fish.

The sisterhood on the other hand who are kinda super heroes are all good, just know they have mostly been around the block and have no qualms in pointing this out. The fact they seem proud to point that out I find strange but whatever I can only judge them on what happens in the future as they have no ties to the mc previously. Moonsong would be my pick from what we know so far if she decided to be faithful to mc rather than just a fuck buddy I mostly enjoyed her character.

Overall aslong as I can choose li's I will probably still see how this goes as the story could be interesting, the writing is not bad outside of the main li's and the English is good. I dont even care there are no animations though it would ofcourse be better with them. My below avg score is all to do with the fact the characters closest to MC range from disgusting to no thanks and they are always the most important part of a vn for me. I would rate this somewhere between 2 and 3 stars but I cant do that so it gets a 2. Without Parker, Riley and Evelyn it would be a 4.

review for v0.3.0.

game is mid as fuck, was expecting so much more from all the talk in the thread, this just kinda boring, maybe it will get better or smth.
nice girl models, shit personalities all around, mostly the mc.
decent lewds, nothing amazing, but decent enough for a quick nut.

The game is amazing. The story, renders, powers, world building, and characters. My personal favourite is Evelyn out of everything about the whole game.

Giving 5 stars is only appropriate for new favourite game. Keep it up.

The MC is kinda annoying. He goes on and on about being a virgin and just catching a glimpse of cleavage is enough for him to pop a boner. He does have one redeeming quality and it's that he doesn't whine when he gets (unfairly) called out for being a virgin, but I believe the reason for this is that it would be an unbearable experience if MC was down every time someone reminded him of how big of a loser he is. Seriously, most conversations are about the MC's virgin/loser status.

It's seriously off-putting how much of the game revolves around putting the MC down, it also plays against the game in a sense that it makes the LIs unlikeable and the whole plot uninteresting. But it goes beyond simply pointing out how big of a loser the MC is. This girl Evelyn uses her power on MC to see his future and keeps on talking about him jerking off and at one point she mentions that he nutted on the chips he ate without realising it. All kinds of fucked up and not in a good way.

Then, there's a scene where you can remember some memories. There's a mention of the MC getting a boner or jerking off in all of them. We get it, he's a virgin and a serial masturbator.

Literally, MC can't catch a break. He meets his idols (the heroines) and not 10 words in, Evelyn is already telling everyone how MC jerked off to her.

Overall, the LIs don't feel that good, either. The heroines are cool, but not much of them is seen, however, the stepfamily are both awful and well, I already spoke of his childhood friend. The stepsister bails on MC's birthday because apparently she would rather take an extra shift at the strip club and the stepmother might be a bit worse. She apparently starts flirting with the waiter during MC's birthday and then go to fuck/masturbate depending on your voyeur settings, she also starts embarrassing MC.

From the moment he stepped foot in that restaurant, MC had the worst time ever. First, pissed off because his stepsister bailed on him, then he spent the rest of it embarrassed because of the stepmother and then again pissed off because she flirted with the waiter and right after that, the waiter obviously teases him. I guess if dev was going for NTR bait, then that was perfect. It's probably as close as you can get to NTR without any cuckcolding.

At the very least, the childhood friend kinda had his back there when the waiter goes overboard, but even despite all of that, the mother continues to flirt with him and still fucks him/masturbastes to him. She's honestly awful.

If you're planning to play this game, I recommend skipping the memories, it will seriously hinder your enjoyment of the game. The renders are decent and there's a sliver of a story, which can maybe blossom into something more than just a serial masturbator with an awful family. The part of the story about the "Sisterhood" is a lot better, and I could see myself enjoying this in the future if we could focus on that because I have honestly no interest in the childhood friend or his family and I would rather avoid them.

The story is a mess with characters presented in one way but later shown doing totally opposite things. So it feels like they are totally inconsistent.
You have the loving and caring mother who fucks random waitress during her sons birthday party and brings total strangers to her house eveyday, exposing her childs for some quick sex. But yet when she appears she acts all holy and like she is mom of the year. If dev wanted her to be a whore, then at least make her act like one, her character is a mess.
There's also the virgin girl thats not really "virgin" because she has "experienced" sex several times already... Sigh, and of course its not cheating because powers and didnt really happen and shit. Renders are ok, they are nothing special as you can see from the preview pics.
Characters as I already mentioned some, are inconsistent and dont really likeable. Story is meh, there are decisions but some things are forced, doesnt matter what you picked, all in all that leaves us with a mediocre game so far, dont think I'll be checking the following updates.

Got the potential to become one of the best super hero games here. Unlike other games this one covers super hero concept throughout the game. Good renders and nice story plot. Good writing. There is free roam elements which is not grindy. Loved his best friend. There is sound effects to make game more immersive. If you like boys series you will this. Here also super heroes are controlled by a certain organization and uses super heroes for commercial purposes. Ch2 ended with a twist. Hoping this will stay here till the completion

Keep up the good work dev looking forward to next updates.

This is honestly one of the best VN's I've seen so far. The characters are each unique and have distinct personalities that show through, even ones who only are on screen for a short amount of time. The quality of writing is excellent as well, both technically and stylistically. Far higher than I've come to expect from a VN, especially this early in its life-cycle. The models themselves are quite well-done as well. They are not all giant-breasted clones the way certain VN's tend to go. Excellent work.

There are a lot of superhero AVNs out there, but this one is easily the best I've ever played.

The character design is excellent. It's very nearly flawless (one minor gripe being the MC's dick; it's the same asset as used in another well-known AVN, and it's just as laughably enormous here as it was in that game), and each of the characters so far has a unique look. I'm excited to see how this developer improves with the visuals as the game progresses, if this is how good they are from the start.

I love the characters we've met. They're well-written, lots of great dialogue, and so far they feel diverse enough that no character feels extraneous.

The writing in general is great: lots of world-building that doesn't feel overwhelming and backstory given in a mostly natural way. You learn a lot about this world and it never feels too much like an exposition dump.

I'm excited for this one, and can't wait to see more.

After playing the story, I Experiened some new things which are not found in any other VNs. The kink system, it is handled in a quite unique way, instead of keeping in a menu list before game start. This kink selection system feels now more immersive. Coming to Lis, it is a fantasy for all of people to fuck with Super heroes and super villains, and I have thought dev will blueball us because of the "hierarchy". But, dev thankfully didn't planned like that and we already got chance to fuck with couple of members in sisterhood. The scene is emerald is a big fantasy for maledom lovers. A super heroine being submissive to you and you can treat her like your sub/slave and she is loving everything you do. It's just wow. She even || licked MC's ass ||. That's amazing. Hope dev may give us more extreme options to dom emerald like || pissing on her, whipping etc ||

Coming to storyline, it is a amazing setup, it's seeing "The Boys" series, but with a lot more superhero count, with all the attractions like Lis, sex that constiute a AVN. And the mystery over MC's parents, attack on him by tiger, his special powers all keeping us on edge of seat.

Coming to visuals, the renders are great in quality and one thing I liked the most is the way you handle "after sex" Scenes. For suppose, if you cum on on her face, she will make conversation with keeping it on face. Same for Cumming on tits or ass or creampie. This feature I didn't seen in any other AVN.

The below one is just personal opinion, the way you are showing deep throats for all the Lis is impressive. All three Lis that have sex scenes (eve, eme, moon) have deep throat scenes. And i expect same that this kink will be available for all the other characters.

Short summary:


The author tried to write a good story. The premise is fantastical, but intriguing. All of the efforts are in vain though, because the game quickly turns into endless fuck scenes with little to no reasoning behind them. Or effort. This wastes the unique characters it has. Renders are inconsistent - some are average, some are very good. Expressions and poses are mostly good.



Good Things

• Some hot characters
• Writing surrounding sex scenes is usually hot
• Potential for a good story

Bad points

• Way too much unearned nudity and sex scenes
• Everyone, including celebrities and relatives want to fuck our virgin MC real bad
• Some characters, especially faces are smooth and low-detailed

Reviewed for version 0.20
This looks like a really good story, but it is still early on. I like the use of powers, the fairly lighthearted story, and the touch of deeper emotions that are hinted at. You get to some porn content relatively quickly, and it gives you the ability to opt out of some content you may not like.
I liked most of the characters, and while they hit some nice tropes to add variety (the best friend girl, the strong girl who wants to be dominated, etc) they do it well, so that is not anything I would hold against them. Probably worth your time, even if it feels too short for now.

This game has a great premise, an interesting plot and great character writing. I look forward to following its continued development. Its currently on the short side, but with the expansion of content it has the potential to become one of the best games on the site.


Edit: as of 0.6 Dev has addressed the majority of my complaints. Game gets better with every update. One of the best games on here. Don't listen to all the incels who can't cope with a LI who has any sexual experience prior to banging MC, that's the crux of most of the poor reviews. Updating rating to 5 stars.

mostly great renders.

mostly exceptional writing, with the need for a proofreader for the rare typo or strangely worded sentence. overall outstanding.

the NTR thing... is up to the player. someone mentioned the restaurant scene. beyond her being horny, she doesn't do anything with anyone but herself unless you explicitly choose to allow it in advance. in fact, this is one of the rare titles that handles not only "kink on" scenarios, but also has fully fleshed alternative scenes for what you don't want to see. as someone anti-NTR myself, the only really uncomfortable moment in game for me was the spitroast scene with some schoolmates, which was a few seconds of oh, well, I guess she's not an LI and really wish I hadn't had to view that. not ideal, but not a showstopper for me, personally.

the characters are nicely developed for the little of the story we've seen so far.

the story itself is decent and has potential to become much more so, tho I personally could have dealt with a little less in exposition up front then flashbacks to catch up to the game starting point.

still, enjoying it so far and looking forward to more.

Review for Origin Story [v0.2.0]
PROS-
Great renders and stunning female models.
CONS-
This VN starts with an interesting story / overview then it becomes just another cliche VN with same old sex hungry step mom/landlady who flirts with waiter whatever you decide to switch voyeurism on/off and MC just watches her flirting with him and she has a sex scene with waiter or masturbates solo in toilet on your birthday based on your choices-pretty much lost my interest to continue after that but finished it in the end and a stupid annoying MC friend and horny virgin MC masturbating to all girls imagining them naked . None of the female love interest personalities were appealing / loveable which I would like to pursue .And free roam which was okay to play but there was no hint / guide like some other games , you have to roam around and hope you saw all the events before ending free roam. The writing of female characters and main character in this VN is a huge let down considering the interesting overview and story in the beginning.

This is a good VN. The story flows really well, and the scenes are as well.

Plot:
It's a coming into your own kind of story. Young adult facing the troubles of life the best way possible. Sex, power, and learning how to live life.

Characters:
Depth and development. Each character you meet is unique and different. Not the usual cookie cutter, cut and paste in other VNs out there. Each has their own story waiting to come out.

Review:
Good renders make this VN hit hard. Seamless transitions, and I didn't notice lag, skipping or missing content.
Characters mesh well with each other well. You even get the typical bully squads tossed in for more dynamic encounters.
Writing is smooth and well thought out. It helps guide the flow of the story.
JDOR, excellent job so far. I hope it continues with all future updates.
I highly recommend this VN. Yes, sex scenes are slow, but worth the wait.

I had more fun with this than almost anything I've played recently. Characters have personalities, setting is interesting, renders are good and frequent, no grinding, writing is actually engaging (!!).

You'll have to suspend your disbelief twice: once for the fantasy setting, once for a couple characters being willing to jump the MC's bones. But at least they're given characterization consistent with it, so it's miles ahead of the usual harem game.

Amazing how much the writing matters in a visual novel, huh. 10/10. Looking forward to the next update.

Absolutely phenomenal. Amazing renders, great power fantasy story, the characters are engaging. Can't wait about what comes next.

The only downside is the pussyfooting around incest/step-incest. It seems they're setting something up for it, but it still weird IMO.

The virginity talk is so exaggerated that it gets really boring after a while.Mc talks about virginity with almost every character he sees.

Mc is constantly in a position to embarrass himself.
On Mc "s birthday a waiter hits on his stepmother and Mc just watches and does nothing.
Mc's character is very weak, he has no control over anything.

No animation, just static images.
Mc is forced to sleep with several women.

The personality of some characters in the game is poorly written.
On Mc "s birthday, his stepmother has sex with a random guy in a restroom.

Your girlfriend is cheating on you mentally, but not physically, thanks to her superpowers.

There is also a group of superheroes who immediately spread their legs so that you can easily steal their powers.

They easily give their superpowers through sex to mc, a stranger they have never met before, maybe mc is a bad guy and will destroy the world.

I mean, the story doesn't make much sense.