VN Ren'Py Our Red String [Ch.14.1.4 Beta] [Eva Kiss]

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Gicoo

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I had the impression Eva loved to write Robert, but merely in a vindictive spiteful way to create the most annoying, pathetic, in-your-face disposable sidepiece. Not someone worth dating in the long run, but more like a Doug stand-in for the early and mid-game to have a replacable sexfriend that can and will get dropped easily without remorse. Eva went out of their way to make him unlikeable, they would've given him some depth or a bigger role in the plot if they wanted him to be likable.
 
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Cautiously optimistic for a Stan update, he's been completely uninteresting so far but I'm curious to see what Lena can shape him into by the end. Happy we're getting anything at all before the new year, really, I didn't expect to.

I definitely agree with Gicoo that Stan's felt like an afterthought, and if he's intended to be a serious love interest he should've played more of a role earlier on and let him build up some redeeming qualities. At the point we're at, Lena has had an army of hot people wanting to date her. Logically it seems pretty much impossible that she'd either skip over or drop every other partner because of her interest in STAN of all people.
 
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Gicoo said:
That's the intended appeal, for sure, but its badly implemented. Stan is on standstill for 11 chapters, then Lena suggests him to work out and encourages him by making with him out. Thats all the development and its as rushed as it is unconvincing.

If he started poorly in chapter 1, but got rejected by Lena right in say chapter 2, then spend the entire game picking himself up, step by step motivating and redeeming himself, it could work. Instead he is a nothing burger for 11 chapters until the incel confession he could've had at the beginning of the game. He has the same low self-esteem as Holly, but Holly makes far quicker and far more often moves on Ian and changes much more fluid and rapidly.

This was much better done with Eric in the first game, who also starts as a whimp, but progresses significantly better paced to the either cuck or chad path, despite not even having much screen presence.

In summary, Stan lacks both quantity and quality in writing. Just being a mirror for the average loser nerd isn't enough, you want that projection of yourself to either succeed (power fantasy) or fail (self-loathing confirmation). Stan isn't managing either of them greatly.
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Stan could have worked as a simp to take advantage of. First getting easy money for the photos and then getting him to pay the rent and even some gifts just in exchange for letting him watch Lena getting fucked by others and her presence. Or if you want to play a kind Lena, refusing him gently would have Stan go the full incel route and be an enemy for Lena and Louise. Recording them with hidden cameras for blackmail, hacking their phones or some shit like that. Maybe even him going violent to get some drama and some Lena's LI being the hero.
 
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Hi everyone; I got back from my trip a couple of days ago, ready to dive into writing the chapter. Out of the 11 planned scenes (including their variations), I’ve completed 6, and their illustrations are already finished and with the colorists. Over the next few days, I’ll focus on continuing the writing and finalizing the illustrations as they come in.



I hope I can have everything ready to release the Alpha at the end of December; let's see if I'm able to do it! Also, I still have to release the polished, full version of v13.1 with additional, small fixes, and an overhauled Gallery thanks to Lara. That's also coming soon, and it will also be released on
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Goddamn it eva. You haven't been able to hit any good decisions for a while now. :HideThePain:
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TrueAlatar said:
hi everybody. So, guys, can someone give you a hint on how to get closer to Ivy?
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Ian needs to have decent charisma to get the confident options to impress her whenever she is around. It should be obvious which answers give her points. Also hit the gym regulary to have good athletics.
In chapter 10, decide to visit the gym. Beat Ivy, which requires high athletic points (wrestlers can avoid it a bit). Then keep flirting with her. She should text you in chapter 12 and Ian can claim his reward.
No sex yet, though.
 
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