Turret

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Changing the topic: Would you rather lend Mina to Veronica for a no-limits, no-tell weekend or spitroast Sophia with Uncle Chuck? Discuss amongst yourselves.
Well, the Mina-Veronica weekend would be no problem, esp. if as some other members said a nice gym membership would be added:p;). But the second one is a no-go! I´d rather keep Sophia for myself and even if a threesome were in the cards, it would NEVER be with Chuck in the mix!
We already have many hints that there is something really wrong with Chuck when it comes to the bedroom stuff! I mentioned it before, there should be alarm bells ringing when a weird genius eccentric like Sophia, who can be clearly dangerous herself if need be, telling us that Chuck is scary.
 

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Well, the Mina-Veronica weekend would be no problem, esp. if as some other members said a nice gym membership would be added:p;). But the second one is a no-go! I´d rather keep Sophia for myself and even if a threesome were in the cards, it would NEVER be with Chuck in the mix!
We already have many hints that there is something really wrong with Chuck when it comes to the bedroom stuff! I mentioned it before, there should be alarm bells ringing when a weird genius eccentric like Sophia, who can be clearly dangerous herself if need be, telling us that Chuck is scary.
I hear what you're saying about Chuck, but you're not at all concerned about Mina being wooed into being the next Mrs. Lynch? :unsure: In my proposed threesome w/Chuck, activities could be over and done in 30-40 minutes, I'd estimate. Even with blue pills, I think there's no way an old guy like Chuck is bouncing back for round 2 in the same evening. In my second scenario, Veronica has a whole 48 to 60 hours to sway Mina's heart. Veronica offers a lot of the traits that women like about men (big, strong, determined), as well as plenty of the traits women like about women. What with Mina exploring and finding herself, I see a real risk that MC could relinquish his lead in that race.
 

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I hear what you're saying about Chuck, but you're not at all concerned about Mina being wooed into being the next Mrs. Lynch? :unsure: In my proposed threesome w/Chuck, activities could be over and done in 30-40 minutes, I'd estimate. Even with blue pills, I think there's no way an old guy like Chuck is bouncing back for round 2 in the same evening. In my second scenario, Veronica has a whole 48 to 60 hours to sway Mina's heart. Veronica offers a lot of the traits that women like about men (big, strong, determined), as well as plenty of the traits women like about women. What with Mina exploring and finding herself, I see a real risk that MC could relinquish his lead in that race.
"Women won't be equal to men, as long as they can't walk down the street bald, beer-bellied in their 50s and think all the opposite sex wants them" :D
My super turbo dick will turn Mina back to me. :D
 
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Turret

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I hear what you're saying about Chuck, but you're not at all concerned about Mina being wooed into being the next Mrs. Lynch? :unsure: In my proposed threesome w/Chuck, activities could be over and done in 30-40 minutes, I'd estimate. Even with blue pills, I think there's no way an old guy like Chuck is bouncing back for round 2 in the same evening. In my second scenario, Veronica has a whole 48 to 60 hours to sway Mina's heart. Veronica offers a lot of the traits that women like about men (big, strong, determined), as well as plenty of the traits women like about women. What with Mina exploring and finding herself, I see a real risk that MC could relinquish his lead in that race.
Well, in my own canon plathroughs Mina is simply a good friend, so her with Veronica or someone else is not a problem. Chuck on the other hand, is a big problem to be solved coming for us.
 
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That apparently no one followed up on his disappearance really needs a good explanation.
That is not very surprising! Beside that Darius fell in love with a house girl and wanted to get her out of this "den of sin", he certainly was not big on gaining friends or making a good impression. Hana disliked him even more than Ian(!) and even Ian himself was rather lukewarm when he told Edwin about Darius. Only after pushing Ian towards the reform path our bro starts to dig around himself too.
 

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That is not very surprising! Beside that Darius fell in love with a house girl and wanted to get her out of this "den of sin", he certainly was not big on gaining friends or making a good impression. Hana disliked him even more than Ian(!) and even Ian himself was rather lukewarm when he told Edwin about Darius. Only after pushing Ian towards the reform path our bro starts to dig around himself too.
Technically Ian will still dig into Darius' papertrail even if the MC doesn't try to reform him (presumably he got a similar, if darker, push from Chuck's phone call in that case).

That said, I agree the relative lack of concern over Darius rings fairly true. From all accounts he was a very abrasive personality who tended to act on impulse. Given that he wasn't from the area originally, it's no surprise most people would accept it when he apparently pulled up stakes and left; they were simply happy he was gone. Ian was the only person who might have reason to look into it, but Ian is both lazy and confident the Club would never do anything... drastic. He probably looked at it as giving his friend space and assumed Darius would call him when he wanted to talk about it. By the time the lack of communication would have become suspicious Ian had moved on and no longer considered Darius's departure relevant... until the MC *forced* him to reconsider the whole event in a more sinister light.

Overall the situation makes sense given the people involved. Personally I think the biggest question in the sequence is why the MC is suddenly so obsessed with Darius just because van Doren raised the subject during his visit. Unlike Ian, the MC was new to the Club when he learned of Darius' disappearance. He didn't have time to build up a casual comfort with the criminal enterprise before being asked to consider how far it would go to protect itself; indeed, he immediately accuses Kathleen of foul play the instant he learned Darius was blackmailing her. If the MC was willing to turn a blind eye to the whole thing after that revelation I don't see why van Doren's cryptic clues would instantly make it a priority. Sure, van Doren obviously wanted the MC to connect the dots, but it's unclear why the MC trusts him enough to let that warning override the tacit decision he'd already made about working for the Club.

I presume the idea is that Abel's visit was sufficiently traumatic that, like Ian, it shook the MC out of the complacent rut he'd fallen into, but I think both the rut and the trauma were a little underplayed. On the other hand, I say that as someone who loathed the Club from the get go so it's entirely possible my own agenda is coloring my take on the MC's complacency.

Either way, it's not a serious problem and it certainly supports the game's pacing to bring Darius to the forefront now.
 

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Personally I think the biggest question in the sequence is why the MC is suddenly so obsessed with Darius just because van Doren raised the subject during his visit.
I don't know about you, but I would probably want to know if the guy I essentially replaced at work and who lived in the same apartment than me, was murdered by my employer or not after he disappeared without a trace. :HideThePain:

We'll see what his parents say and why they might have never looked into his disappearance (or maybe they even did).
 
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I don't know about you, but I would probably want to know if the guy I essentially replaced at work and who lived in the same apartment than me, was murdered by my employer or not, after he disappeared without a trace. :HideThePain:

We'll see what his parents say and why they might have never looked into his disappearance (or maybe they even did).
Same. Also pretty sure that is the reasoning Edwin is using to motivate this investigation.
 

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I presume the idea is that Abel's visit was sufficiently traumatic that, like Ian, it shook the MC out of the complacent rut he'd fallen into, but I think both the rut and the trauma were a little underplayed. On the other hand, I say that as someone who loathed the Club from the get go so it's entirely possible my own agenda is coloring my take on the MC's complacency.

Either way, it's not a serious problem and it certainly supports the game's pacing to bring Darius to the forefront now.
You pretty much got it.

When Edwin learned about it from Kathleen, his suspicion of her was just an idle intrusive thought caught between his anger at the old woman phoning up his mother. But Abel brought it to the forefront of his mind. One, it's like "hey", someone just came into your home like it wasn't even a thing. Two, he purportedly found spying devices. And three, after that revelation, he hammers home the criminality of Edwin's new associates. That idle thought suddenly becomes more tangible, and less buried underneath all the excitement (and navel gazing) that kept his suburban ass conveniently preoccupied.

Whether that is sufficiently conveyed in the text isn't for me to say, but that's the idea.

You kinda hit on my main concern when writing the recent scenes. Whether or not it was unduly traumatic, but I was worried that it might be overplayed against Edwin's characterization before Abel's visit. I.e., it happens, he panics, calls Ian in the middle of the night, and sweeps his house for bugs the next day. The disconnect between Edwin before Abel's visit and after and whether it sufficiently bridged the two.
 

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Personally I think the biggest question in the sequence is why the MC is suddenly so obsessed with Darius just because van Doren raised the subject during his visit.
Beside the most stupid or dark variants of Edwin, Abel and Sophia´s visit most certainly would be a wake-up call! Just think about it:
- Abel is the CEO of a medical empire, Sophia his right hand and those two take time out of their surely rather busy calendar to "home invade" an, by even his own admission, quite average guy/student for an "educational" chat. They could have sat on their knowledge without problems, why warn/educate Edwin at all? Them doing this should hammer home how earnest the situation is or can become one day.
- Abel and Sophia have their own shady sides, but it becomes clear that they are at the Club for different reasons than the normal member/customer. In addition, the longer the story goes on we can learn that van Doren and Sophia dislike, even loath the PC leadership. Them being there is for business and/or currently unknown reasons only.
- Sophia and Abel might want to recruit Edwin for their plans or simply warn him since he a)knew van Doren and is a bit of a fanboy early on and b) our MC clicks with Sophia, which should be a rare thing given her personality.
 
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You pretty much got it.

When Edwin learned about it from Kathleen, his suspicion of her was just an idle intrusive thought caught between his anger at the old woman phoning up his mother. But Abel brought it to the forefront of his mind. One, it's like "hey", someone just came into your home like it wasn't even a thing. Two, he purportedly found spying devices. And three, after that revelation, he hammers home the criminality of Edwin's new associates. That idle thought suddenly becomes more tangible, and less buried underneath all the excitement (and navel gazing) that kept his suburban ass conveniently preoccupied.

Whether that is sufficiently conveyed in the text isn't for me to say, but that's the idea.

You kinda hit on my main concern when writing the recent scenes. Whether or not it was unduly traumatic, but I was worried that it might be overplayed against Edwin's characterization before Abel's visit. I.e., it happens, he panics, calls Ian in the middle of the night, and sweeps his house for bugs the next day. The disconnect between Edwin before Abel's visit and after and whether it sufficiently bridged the two.
You may have overplayed the MC's reaction a little, but as I said I think it mostly works. The only wrinkle I see is just how well Abel hammered home the criminality of the Club. To me, Hana's encounter with August's old friend was a bigger wake up call than Abel's unsupported speculations, so that's when I would have started panicking.

But that's me. I've consistently been less comfortable working for the Club than the MC has been; I don't need the money the way he does and most of the Club's perks are things I actively avoid. I can see why he might be willing to cut it more slack when a problem arises, and/or why he'd be more surprised when Club business literally forces its way into his living room.


- Sophia and Abel might want to recruit Edwin for their plans or simply warn him since he a)knew van Doren and is a bit of a fanboy early on and b) our MC clicks with Sophia, which should be a rare thing given her personality.
Hey, speak for yourself. Your MC might click with Sophia, but I sincerely hope mine does not. Even if I liked her personality, trying to roofie my avatar is something of a black mark. The less I have to interact with that woman the better.
 
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